Up in Flames

Heat of the fire that consumes you

Dissapears completely in the full moon.

Misty haze of the night

She clambers up on her tower.

Fixated looking atop the hill

She sees things that are unclear.

In and out they fade

Despair pushing through her features.

She fights to stay calm.

Her eyes bore into mine.

As she waves to say hello

Her heart receives a deathly blow.

She rushes towards the sudden calamity

She fears the dread and anxiety.

Surrounded once by intimate beauty

Never before to be seen again

Lifelessly she stares

Fixated atop her midnight flares.

Looks as though she ponders things

Talking of things that could have been.

She glances..

Sideways, both up and then down.

Her smile turns then into a frown.

She fumbles, cries hysterically..

Where is everyone?

They have deserted me.

 

Reviews

[Isabella Menace]

Confusion mixed with despair, anxiety, some fear? Wonderfully penned, all your poems are thought-provoking. Love this peice, Hon. Keep on, I know you will!

[Twilight]

This brought thoughts and feelings to my mind, of nostalgia for the past, and lost friends. Also, the desire to feel part of a community or group of people? Also, you have managed to portray the state of mind of your protagonist, rather effectively. She seems to be consumed with angst, and a little confused or phased, by what is going on around her. Thankyou, topsyturvy! Keep writing!

[GenMuffin7]

i'm very touched, you did a fantastic job of playing with your readers' emotions.

[Orlando Murcia]

Very deep
I felt a tad of sorrow and
confusion as I read this

People suck huh?

Great write

Orlando M

[Silvario]

i realy enjoyed this piece. this was very well written and i loved the smooth paced pace tempo. i loved how it ended as well. all in all well penned, very talented.

nicely done :)