Longing

 

The sun is slowly setting; the sky is a fiery red as the sun battles with the approaching darkness. I can hear my brothers and sisters in the distance singing disturbing the peaceful silence with their noise; some find it beautiful, a natural chorus. I glance across the emptying park; she is still sitting by the oak, a blanket wrapped round her shoulders. She always comes just before dusk, sits in the same spot and reads until the sun goes down. I’ve watched her from the very first day. She is unlike anybody I’ve ever known or seen and everyday I fall a little bit more in love with her, sometimes I catch her glancing in my direction and my heart skips a beat. I know it’s wrong, I should not be feeling what I’m feeling. I’m different to her.

Some people wish they could fly away, be free as a bird but I want the opposite, I would give it all up in a heartbeat just so I could be with her.

As sorrow fills my heart with the dream which will never be, I flex my wings and soar into the sky. If only I were human.

 

   

Author's Note

This is one of the very first short stories I've ever written please be kind :)

Reviews

[Amor-de-angel]

Nice piece of writing, I didn't see the twist either. Keep it up and welcome to the cafe.

[WildRose]

The story is very poetic, well done.

I had guessed that the "thinker" wasn't human but I had thought that it was going to be a bug and was pleasantly surprised that it was a bird.

Best wishes for your writing!

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[Taylor H]

Great job! This was good for it being your first short story. Lol even though it's only a paragraph long lol it's still good. The only thing about it is I knew you were going to end it with them not being human. I can't really say anything since i'm writing a vampire story as well, but I feel like every one has a vampire story on here. It's not really a surprise anymore. Maybe if it was drawn out more or if you added more detail to it (like you could have us convinced that there's a different reason they cant be together and then bring up the not human thing and through us for a loop lol). Great job for this only being a paragraph long I want to read more of it. You should really turn this into a book

[BABSIE BEE]

Welcome. What a nice little story with twisting end. Thanks for sharing.
BBXX

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

I have to admit, I did not get the twist until the end. Now that I've read it a seond time I an see all the piees of the jigsaw that fit together. Very well written for your first short story. Hope to see more from you.