I Don't Know

I don't know

Its been too long since I ever have

Past dictating my decisions now

Causing me to hesitate with the slightest of things

I don't know

Acquaintances would be on me left and right

Attacking almost everything they see

Going after everything that makes me feel good

I don't know

I feel like now I can't act like myself

Really I haven't acted like myself in so long

I'd be surprised to see who I really am

I don't know

I really think that its time to move on

Go out in the world and meet new people

Detach myself from everything I'm attached to now

I don't know

It sounds easy to do it

But is it really easy making friends?

I don't want to be left alone with myself

I really don't know

I think its time to find something new

But it's so hard to let go of the past and move forward

And I'm afraid people won't come with me along the way

I'm stuck in my head, in this pit of my thoughts

Guys I'm telling you, I really don't know what I want to do today.

Author's Note

Let me know what I can improve, thanks!

Reviews

[cassandra ziemba]

i love this poem, you know some times its better not to know. life will surprise you every day and not knowing whats coming is the best feeling. life is like a box of chocolates, you never know what you will get.

[sereenaoutloud]

i like this a lot. Nice write

[TheLostMind]

Wow. The emotions are really powerful in this one. "I don't know" - the truth is, nobody really knows. We all take a leap of faith, that's all.

A really good write :)

[Emily]

A poem speaking the truth about trying to move on to a new chapter of life. Good write!

[Nini]

Ricky, I remember when I was 16 (amazing, but I do!) and I thought I knew everything. Then, I graduated and realized I didn't know as much as I thought. At 50, I still don't know! You put the feelings into words very nicely. I think most all people can relate to this. Great job!

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Talk to your neighbour, or to the man in the bus or train, there are so many opportunities to meet people. It's because they are so obvious and right before our nose, we mostly don't see them. Interesting writing, Ricky. :) Rudi

[Amare]

Hmm, sounds like an internal dialogue that would be interesting to see written as a narrative poem

[Kat Marie]

I relate to this one so much..

The only thing I would improve is some of the language itself... It's kind of like a brain trick to use big words and poetic language in a poem to make it come off waaay better then it may actually be.

I like how the poem is generic in the way it's describing how the person feels, without giving away the actual situation. It lets the reader/audience use their imagination.

[Neo]

I think that spacing would help this poem a lot, maybe separating into different stanzas? When read out loud it's obvious that the poem has a structure, but that part gets lost and confused when all the lines are clumped together. It makes it seem like you're writing "I don't know" randomly, and it doesn't come off as being very clever. If you take another look at it, you might be able to tweak it so the flow is more distinct, without losing the feeling.
Thanks for sharing. :)

[Chain of Hearts]

Nice piece of writing! It really has a realistic feel about it, awesome job!