reasons you should choose me

reasons you should choose me

A Poem by Taylor Lane
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here's why it should be me

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Because i never touch your eyes
And i remember not to squeeze your sides
Because i'll always hold your hand
And remind you that you are an amazing man
Because i always say goodnight
Because you always squeeze me tight
But then i realize that there are few
True reasons i should be chosen by you
Because she is prettier than i 
Because her eyes light up the sky
Because your hand always finds her waist
And you search for her in a crowded place
Please don't forget about me too
Because i always search for you
She makes you laugh when she's around
But i pick up the pieces when you break down
Yet i'm not enough to bide your time
And you no longer question why i'm only fine
i should have made you pinky swear
When you said you'd choose me over her
Now i am always trying to show
You why you shouldn't let me go
because i’m always on the phone
when you feel sad and so alone
because $20 didn’t scare me away
even when i found out why you got paid
because i just wanted to take care of you
because you told me you wanted me too
but the reason i most think that you should choose me,
is because nobody else wanted to
and this feeling unwanted is slowly killing me

© 2017 Taylor Lane


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this could use work. first: you need stanzas. second: the long lines bog down some of the sentences. third: certain lines don't relate to the reader. $20 dollars didn't scare me away? why you got paid?

Posted 7 Years Ago


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Taylor Lane

7 Years Ago

my writing generally flows as such, i intentionally didn't use stanzas, and yes certain lines don't .. read more
Bare trees

7 Years Ago

They were just suggestions anyway. good luck.
Taylor Lane

7 Years Ago

thank you for your suggestions, i will take them into account when writing

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