Broken Dreams

Broken Dreams

A Story by The Violent Wolf
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micro flash fiction

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Stealing men, brothers, husbands, sons, away to a foreign land.

They take up guns, march out, and follow orders.

Rivers of blood, bomb borne dirt raining down.

Shots are fired, soldiers and civilians fall.

Nightmares come when sleep is allowed.

Screams, groans, gasps, whimpers, cries.

Survival of the fittest.

If not terminated.

Returned damaged.

War.

© 2014 The Violent Wolf


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Overall, a solid piece of writing. If I were to criticize anything, it would be the lack of word painting (given that this is a poem). The subject matter you are writing about has so much room for metaphors and figurative language that could potentially draw more readers into the world in which you are describing.

All of the above, I already know about war—give me experience or feeling that I may not be able to understand on the surface. Something deeper. More meaningful.

Great idea, and a good start—give me more!

I look forward to reading more of your material!

Posted 5 Years Ago


nice write. succinct. to the point. sums up the devastation of war.
I like it. good job.

Posted 5 Years Ago


The Violent Wolf

5 Years Ago

Thank you (:
amazing how in a few lines the tradegy of war is summed up

Posted 5 Years Ago


A really interesting format, and a good descriptive write in a small space.

Posted 5 Years Ago


The Violent Wolf

5 Years Ago

Yeah, it was a little hard, but ultimately fun to write in this form xD
This seems more like a poem, but this allows me to see what's going on. I like it, in a good way...

Posted 5 Years Ago


The Violent Wolf

5 Years Ago

yeah, it's sometimes called a 55 word flash fiction story, or the ten line flash fiction story, than.. read more
Silent Wolf

5 Years Ago

Coolio. :3

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Added on May 30, 2014
Last Updated on May 30, 2014
Tags: war, brothers, sons, fathers, nightmares, broken, survival

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The Violent Wolf
The Violent Wolf

Pascoag, RI



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I can't write well upon demand. I have to wait until a picture, theme or whatever hits me. I use real world experiences in my writing. Music is an inspiration. Some of my poems or whatever are random,.. more..

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