Missing Him

What it feels like to miss and hate

Is it bad that I want him to come crawling back? Is it bad I want him to say that I meant something, that everything that went down between us wasn’t empty words and promises? I miss him more than I thought I would. I’m mostly over him but when he pushed me out of his life, that was the worst bit. I mean nothing to him. It was only a month but it was a crazy deep emotion filled month. He erased all of it and that’s what I hate the most. I hate that I miss him.

I hate you, I love you comes to mind.

© 2017 obsessedwriter

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Hello!
Reading this, it is clear the narrator hurts, and longs for both him and his recognition. But it is not evocative. If that sounds harsh, I don't mean to be, because I believe that what you have here is a good start to get the dialogue between you and the page flowing; you just need to explore some of these sentiments you expound.

When you say,
"Is it bad that I want him crawling back?"
ask yourself, "How does he crawl? How would you want him to crawl?"
When you say,
"Is it bad I want him to say that I meant something?"
"Something" is vague, and brings no imagery or emotion. What do you want to mean to him? the world? the moon? the invisible lunar lust that brings the tide in high with waves crashing against the shore, over and over again? Or perhaps that miniature feeling of thanks and everyday appreciation one gets when they see more McDonald's fries at the bottom of the bad when they thought they gone. The point is: you've laid out these questions well enough, now you gotta answer them and show what they mean to you.

Anywho, I know the cathartic feeling writing gives. If that's what you're going for, then disregard what I say, but if you want the reader to share your feelings, you gotta show them.

Regardless, it is a great start! Thanks for sharing and, please, keep writing!