Life

Poetry speaks

What trail is there but the one of failure, for that is all I see. I try so hard to walk with out fault, but all I do is fall. This trail is rough and short, but it seems oh so long. Was there a time when I had a choice, but did I listen? Was there a straight and smooth trail, that no one has taken? I'm so weak, my heart says don't go on, but my soul says walk. This all just seems pointless, for there is no reason for me to be here. I look at a sign, maybe it will tell me what to do. But all I see is one word, the name of the trail. "Life"

Reviews

[V]

I've often been there at this very point where everything seems insignificant and studded with bad experiences. I like the flow of your thoughts, a stream of consciousness brought to digital paper. There is one line, I kind of tripped over a little; "when I did have a choice", I think it'd read better if you wrote: " when I had a choice ". Your version breaks the flow slightly.

[unspokenpain]

Thank you. I will make the corrections

[V]

You're welcome. Glad I could help.

[Patrick Kimera]

WOW! That is actually amazing! You know that's like kinda what am going through right now... And am glad to meet someone who's actually seeing things in my perspective. The poem's alot great though!

[unspokenpain]

Im glad you was able to connect.

[zunie frost]

You explain life very good
It's unique way of telling a poem

[unspokenpain]

I'm glad you liked it

[zunie frost]

welcome !!!!