Let Go

My first ever poem

From beginning hope and blind beliefs you do not let go. From the warnings of men and friends alike you do not let go From the cheating winds and lies of blood you do not let go From all your hopes and refusing eyes you do not let go Now you're bruised and weak yet you won't let go Now you're crying and ashamed yet you won't let go Now you're all out of joy yet you won't let go Now you're left with few companions yet you won't let go Soon you'll be all alone because you didn't let go Soon you'll be wishing you could run away because you didn't let go Soon you'll be long forgotten because you didn't let go Soon he'll devour your last bit of life because you didn't let go My love, My life, just look in my eyes, and just let go.

Reviews

[Elizabeth Maguire]

Wow...that was beautiful, so beautiful it brought tears. I loved every word of it. It is so relatable and so true. For it being your "first poem ever" you knocked it out of that park. I absolutely loved it. Keep writing because I would love to hear your next masterpiece.

[unspokenpain]

I'm sorry I made tears fall, but i'm happy that a poem the first poem I wrote around my sophomore year was highly praised. I hope you enjoy my work.

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Wonderful poem and great message for all of us. Great job on describing all that happens just because we don't let go. Nice write. N

[unspokenpain]

Thank you. im happy you enjoyed it ^.^

[West Lake Angel]

I love that last line. It's so comforting and freeing.

[unspokenpain]

I'm happy you enjoyed it ^.^

[Patricia Stephmore]

You will feel the regret...yet you won't let go...how beautiful.
The concept and writing style are really nice.
Bravo!!

[unspokenpain]

i'm hppy you liked it

[AliciaB]

Wow. Intense, and very impressive for your first ever poem. The first stanza is probably my favorite, and the line "From the cheating winds and lies of blood" is very cool - freaky, and somewhat difficult to understand, but very powerful in terms of imagery. The final line is also intriguing in its emotional intensity and obscurity. Overall, this is a very interesting piece, filled with intertwining and contrasting themes of hope and despair. The repetition is highly effective. Vey nicely written!

[unspokenpain]

Thank. The feedback I got from this poem was the spark that made me continue to write

[AliciaB]

Awesome! I am very glad for that. Keep it up!

[Anindita Janhabee]

So surprising play of words...
Sometimes it is better to let go some people to re-enter your life with new hope and joy... Just let go... And one day, the one will come to you...
Very well penned.. Keep writing...

[unspokenpain]

I'm glad you liked it