still you

Calm down, little child
For you know nothing
Still, you're ignorant
In this vast world
Filled With mysteries
And unknown,-- bounded

Still you should be nourished
Be fed, by wisdom
Infused, with knowledge
Nurtured with love, and
Awaken, by truth's light
For you can't stand alone

Alone in the darkness
You should dwell in yourself
For you, is still a stranger
A stranger in confusion
Search for a true you
For you're the one who know you

Then you start trembling
In this cold battle called life
With, still, many to unveil
A life is like a war
Where everything is a matter of
Life of death, do or die

You need to struggle,
 Sacrifice and be wounded
For that wound will be your teacher
Thereafter, those struggles
You shall be rewarded
For those deeds will have its worth

There, you shall triumph, remembering
You're still on the same ground
Then and there, you are you
Because you knew you

Reviews

[heich]

nindot au..lol..im glad i forced you to join here..lol..

[dovetailer]

you write of truth...
we are who we are...
we need to find what we are...
we need to be the wind in our own sails...
and that journey...whether it bring joy or pain...will bring us full circle...
we are who we are...

[Dan Ryoma]

The point of the poem was very clear until the last stanza. You could almost do without it. There are also some errors with word choice and punctuation. I would suggest going over it once more and maybe reading it out loud. I liked where the 'life is like war' simile could have gone. Life being a matter of life and death is too obvious and doesn't pose a reason for your simile. However, I did like that a wound could be one's teacher.

[nono]

Very nice expressions, details, and it's unique....I LOVED it....Keep it up can't wait to see more....NICE JOB!

[Shin]

This one is very well expressed, the emotion and the thoughts of oneself, it's great, nice work, I liked this one a lot.

[TeenRomance2]

Simply beautiful.

[Ian Faraway]

Official, any poem you might have, is directly related to my life, damn you! And it was very good, very wise and true words spoken from an expert poet :D

[Randolf Ramos]

We are youth once, and it will pass just once but we are morphing into a man full of wisdom. WE have to instill to youth the wisdom of virtuous life, that it could bring us happiness to the extent of knowing nothing but a serene way of living into a productive life!

[Randolf Ramos]

We are youth once, and it will pass just once but we are morphing into a man full of wisdom. WE have to instill to youth the wisdom of virtous life, that it could bring us happiness to the extent of knowing nothing but a serene way of living into a productive life!


keep on writing!
I got to learn a lot from you.