My first and last resort

This poem I dedicate to God

He is said to be the one who owns everything,

The one who owns everyone;

The one who knows all the tenses,

Through whom we get our things done.

 

He does not appear in front of me,

There is no verbal communication in his part;

Still he can see me thoroughly clear,

And surely I can communicate through my heart.   

 

I call out to Him when I am in my troubles & needs,

I offer my respect to Him with my faith & trust;

Our wishes may or may not come true sometimes,

But for surely He does everything in everyone’s interest.

 

I travel meeting people and carrying various things around a lot,

But neither do I need to take Him nor do I ever lose him:

I begin my things and deeds in his blessings & remember him at all conclusions,

This therefore makes Him my first and last resort.

 

 

Reviews

[Ryan]

You have some very good things going on in this poem. What stands out to me the most is your last stanza where you say, "neither do I need to take HIm nor do I ever lose Him." You could mayve re word this and say "neither do I need to take Him, or find Him. Never do I lose Him" or something like that to make it flow better. Other wise this is a good start and a very profound statement. Also try adding more to make it longer :)