May you be the tougher.

My steph father was diagnosed with pancreas cancer a few days ago. I wrote this for him.

Fears

Tears

Beams

Broken dreams

 

The world shivers, my breath stands still.

 

Why did you become ill?

 

Flashing lights

no more fights.

 

The bright pearl

its  life to unfurl.

 

Fears

Tears

Beams

Broken dreams

 

I pray for you to overcome

all pain and suffer.

May you become

the tougher.

 

Author's Note

New style of writing. I hope you like it.

Reviews

[Matt G]

I really like this and the ending is very powerful, I only have one problem with it. It feels sort of forced, like you didn't feel like writing, but did anyway. Despite this, it is a very nice piece and it is also powerful. It hit home with the ending and forced some feelings out of me having had someone close to me suffer like this and me wishing them to over come it. Great job with this and I like this style also. =)

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

poignant in its brevity and shorter burst of lines~ relates the frustration and helplessness one feels in the face of a loved one's illness~ well written and related poem~

[BethWilliamson.]

This is really good, the setup is clever,
and i like how you have put in a question,

I like how also, to everybody that can read it, they can take it in their own way, and it has many expanations xx

[Adelia Alighieri]

I love the outline, and your new style suits the prose perfectly. I hope your step father gets well soon. :)