(41) Pizza Of Life

First we take the base.
Our foundation of life.
We spread it with happiness.
And we then add our toppings.
With a sprinkle of hope.
A little bit of joy.
A gathering of desire.
Maybe a splashing of caring.
Finished off with plenty of love.
Then we place the pizza in the oven.
To be baked by the sands of time.
Take it out and allow it to cool.
You can now taste the pizza of life.
All you have to do is to enjoy.

copyright Chris Smith 2010

Reviews

[Emily]

First,I would combine the first two lines.It would flow more that way.And on the 5th line, I would erase the 'with'.I think that 'lashing has more of a negative connotation,so I'd replace it with dash or some other word of that sort.Other than that,I like it. It has a fun tone,and your metaphors are good with the rest of the poem.Good job!

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

Such a cool poem!

[Derek S.Keck]

You've made me reflect and hungry at the same time. I love it Chris; it's a beautiful write!

[Pebbles]

fun write chris :)

[M.Babu]

Life would taste so good with toppings like that. Refreshingly imaginative how you've ensared life with the notion of pizza making. I'm all for it.
Forget the anchovies i ordered this is great:)
Great imagery here.

[Lilly Negoi]

*sigh* yeah, it would be good to have only those toppings on that damn pizza...but sometimes the cook mistakes the bottles and we end up wondering why did it have too much or too less of something...

[Jeremy Wyatt]

Good fun writing C, my life is like the Loch Lomond tandoori pizza, an intimidating mess but it sort of works... X

[Tommy]

Ha, ha, yes, it can be so good the pizza of life when we take time to sit back and enjoy it. I like my pizza with an ice cold beer :) Helps me relax and take it in...

[HopelesslyDevoted]

so cute! awesome idea! wish i would have thought of it first!

[Althelia Marie Caine]

Very well written. You described this very well.

[OT]

a great metaphor - pizza of life - take a slice! haha