(99) A Crushed Rose

A crushed rose lies on the snow
Broken petals red like blood
She lies defeated, a lost glow
Grasping thorns that cut her skin

Her heart lies hurt and tattered
Only a white robe from the cold
No love, for it never mattered
Her body now a victim to the chill

Feeling rejecting and cast aside
Bitter feelings are now her curse
Like the rose, she feels dead inside
Uncaring of the cruel touch of Winter

No one could mend her ruined heart
No one could now warm this lost soul
She will forever feel she is torn apart
From the uncaring one who did her wrong

copyright Chris Smith 2008

Reviews

[M.Babu]

"Her heart lies hurt and tattered
Only a white robe from the cold
No love, for it never mattered
Her body now a victim to the chill"

"No one could mend her ruined heart
No one could now warm this lost soul
She will forever feel she is torn apart
From the uncaring one who did her wrong"

What a really touching piece my friend! Truly heartfelt and real!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Very moving work. I like the use of the rose in comparison to the woman's feelings. Well done.
Light,
Siddartha

[emona]

i love this poem i have felt this way before

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beautiful analogy of a broken heart...very poetic very beautiful

[Kathryn]

Wow. I loved it! The last line is really powerful, but the opening stanza is my favourite. well done :)

[Sukriti Suki]

Good one...I loved the last stanza, esp the last line.

[Aidz]

Nice opening stanza

Good write

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Fabulous imagery and cut glass wording, well done, good read

[Adora.xo]

This is beautiful. The descriptions are tangible, and the words are priceless. Wonderful piece here, depicting lonliness, sadness... and that empty feeling that comes after it all. Bravo

~Adora

[HopelesslyDevoted]

gorgeous descriptions

[Art]

sad...how sad to be left alone...and unloved...