101 Searching For One Day

I wanted to see the blue sky
But there are dark clouds instead
Blocking out the shining Sun
The heat taking away by the cold

So I took a walk to the river
Throwing stones in the water
The anger raging up inside me
And I scream out to the World
"Why can't I have one day"?

I wanted to hear the birds sing
The wind was keeping them away
If only I heard their beautiful chorus
But the howl was making them silent

So I took a walk to the broken down mill
Kicked at the crumbling down wall
Taking out all of my frustration
And I shout out to a deaf planet
"Why can't I have one day"?

I thought of the woman that I love
Of the time when we will be together
Even though the days seem like years
Before I can be with her once again

So I took a walk through my dreams
Where I knew she would be waiting
Ridding these troubles in my head
And I say to her a promise to keep
"We will be together again one day"


copyright Chris Smith 17th May 2011       

Reviews

[Ashley]

the way this flowed from one want to another was absolutely flawless. the imagery emotion and desires are beautifully expressed. the ending is a perfect and seamless fit, as it seems that sometimes we have to go inside ourselves to get what we want...even if it is a fleeting dream

[Lily Mae]

Beautifully said Chris.. when you can't be physically together you can be comforted in knowing that your two souls are forever entwined and waiting..xxx

[KATHY SUE SILLS]

Chris, This is such a beautiful write!

So I took a walk through my dreams
Where I knew she would be waiting
ridding these troubles in my head
And I say to her a promise to keep
"We will be together again one day"

Excellent poem!

[Art Sun]

nice poem Chris...a wishfull idea within poetic thoughts...

[BlueberryKisses]

Great poem, every stanza is brilliant, I enjoyed reading this, thanks for the RR :)

[FaithfullyJennyBear]

This is really good, I love the repetetion throughout the poem, and I was drawn in from the beginning because straight away you got me thinking 'why one day? what would this day consist of?' and then it became clearer as I read on.

Great write :)
Yours faithfully,
Jenny :) x

[Sukriti Suki]

We all do search for peace, love, life. This was simple and yet said so much. Enjoyed it.

[Aidz]

Nice write Chris and I like the question asked

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Ah Chris you speak to readers, quaint and rested in equal measure, ell done, good read.

[FJ Davis]

Melancholy desires so well expressed.
Very fine poem, Chris--and thoroughly satisfying read.

[Emily B]

what we want and what we need are so many miles apart sometimes . . . one day, though