Thistle

A poem about how we need to let the young dream or our world could turn ugly.

There once way a boy who lived in a dream
Everyone told the boy he could not live like this
Why asked the boy, and in return all they did was laugh

I'll show you said the boy
And built a house made of thoughts and memories
A wink here, a kiss there, and never a crack to fall into

Still they laughed
The boy became angry and tears started to fall from the sky
Darkness covered the boys new home


And some may ask why
You see this boy you just might know
This boy is everywhere you go

Lost he may be, alone in the dark
Where no one else can see
But don't anger this child

For his name means fear
He was bourn on a fault line
Raised by witches

His father was devil
His mother the neutron bomb
He makes love to L.S.D. then he moves on

So think about it next time when you tell a child no
Or tell them you can't do that�

Reviews

[Brittany]

You have an interesting build-up with this piece. I can almost see my grand-mother, wagging a no-no finger at me, as she try to warn of badness to come.

The progression of the boy and his torment nicely shadows our dark morality, and children are always the victims of our decisions.

The photo is frightning and effective, but I almost wish that there was a line after "Or tell them they can't do that..." to sort of transition the reader a bit better.

All in all good job, an interesting piece.

[Stacy]

Very nicely put and the symbolism was so evident. I must say though, that picture was a bit creepy, lol.

[Sheila Kline]

Kelley,
This is a thought invoking write indeed! You are so right in that we need to allow the young to birth their own ideas as they invent, be creative, solve problems, learn to survive, and also to dream!
Nice write that holds much to take to heart!

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. great strength in this writing... good choice in words in many of your stanzas.. I truly do not like to see children told they can not do something even when they are not good at it.. let them find out for themselves.. every person should have a dream and be supported when they strive for something! Thank you for sharing!

[Michael X]

Wow, many amazing lines, the delving dark nature has consuming feature with dark passions arising
as if smoke from the ashes of hell's desire in abstract. really nice work!

[Tony]

a good lesson to think on, letting children follow their dreams is all positive and if they have no dreams, they have nothing and when they have nothing, the devil himself moves in to destroy. Good write Kelley.

Tony