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how can you spend so much time

doting on and seeing to

the every need of someone

how can you love someone

and give them your all

and be satisfied

with them not returning your

deepest affections

how can you persist

if the one person who is supposed to make

you feel the most joy

is the biggest source of your pain

how can you claim i don’t care

when i tell you every day

when i show you every way

how can you

Reviews

[Raylene]

Okay hello dear my name is Raylene.
Your poem is beautiful yet your doing it a crime with this nonsense.
1. "Doting" I think you mean doing
2. Capital errors all signal Is should be capitalized as well the first of a new sentence.
3. Your writing is like your child give it a name and cherish it.
4. I hope as I read on I will not have to be this hard on you, yet if I did not see talent I would move on.

[A hare off]

Often this is the way it is. Sad tale but relatable.