Maria's Respite

This is a sequel to the Maria, I love you. Sorry, for not writing a proper synopsis, I just have writer's block. However, if you end up hating it or liking it, I'll be happy either way.

Within bleeding hands,
she painted his world in disarray…
causing the heavens
to collide
within him,
what was once a scene so red and hot,
became
one of glimmering
aqua glass.

So, fairest Maria,
where in
this flaming sea of glass,
and wine
is your respite?

Unfortunately,
these words
melt away before the
cold,
yet searing
heat of the heavens…
and
as blood
causes this cerulean
sea to turn,
he's blinded by light.

Ah, My Maria,
il veut ta bouche.
Nonetheless,
there exists
no
heaven for you.

Drowned in a sorrow so deep,
clouds
yield sepia rain
which adds more to the
limitless sea.
Thereupon Maria and he parting,
it became
justly so that
he bequeath
a splendor so Grande,
it shattered
Maria's fortifications.
So, now in tasting pleasure.
She finally yielded…
but, not in love,
as he hoped.

For upon parting lips,
she grasped
her pale porcelain breast.

Then the sea became tame,
revealing a
violet ocean…
Maria with now gray tears,
like
the silent rain, continued to fill
the space with
a depth so deep, none could conjure
thought.
Thus, she ended by saying,
"mon cheri, je vous veux mourir."
Without further command,
he did justly that.
For all passion evaporated,
in aqua mists.

Reviews

[Margaret Marie Hubbard]

Such amazing flow and a beautiful piece! I love the older more eloquent style of this! Brava!

[songstress]

thank you for reading and reviewing. I'm glad to see that you approve.

[The Spirit Chaser]

Beautiful piece. Perfect depiction of tragedy and obsession. That's the way I see it. Entwined French lends it a special kind of beauty. Simply amazing.

[songstress]

Thank you for reviewing, and I am so happy that you picked up on the obsession. Not too many people have done so, and seeing you acknowledge the element makes me really happy for it. Thank you so much for reviewing.

[Lyn Anderson]

Pity everyone else stole all the good stuff to say. But this is an amazing piece really, with perfect timing to add the French. A great read.

[songstress]

thank you once again for the kind words. It's always nice to hear from you.

[m.s.early]

Oh what pale gray tragedy. Yes Love, will I die for thee even as you ask of it. Could I have failed to touch your heart at a greater length? So many great lines I'd have to copy paste and only result in repeating what you'd already done. This has a beauty that aches and makes me rigid with clenched teeth having known such bitter commitment to such a vicious host.

[Frieda P]

Too funny I googl'd 'mon cheri, je vous veux mourir' and your poem came up on another writing site, I finally got it...good to go, what was I saying. ha Lot's of emotions fill'd within colors hues here.

Drowned in a sorrow so deep,
clouds
yield sepia rain
which adds more to the
limitless sea.

Seriously what's sadder than sepia rain, the whole tone of this one seems desperation, that's what happens when you take a breather it seems. Dying seems so tragic but not within a love song, down through history, seems lovers are willing to risk everything for a feeling.

Passion evaporating in aqua mists, a soul totally dispersed in heartache. Very sad tale here, if you have writer's block then I'll take some of whatever you're having the next time my pen gets stuck. Excellent read.

[songstress]

Thank you for reading, and yes I was on another writing site before this. FictionPress, So I'm transferring and adding poems onto this one. The first site didn't bode well with me, and I found myself, looking for a new audience. One that would help me view things in a different light. Nonetheless, I'm sure you found that Mon cheri translates to the masculine form of my dearest, without the accent, as my key board does not have it. Moreover, Je vous veux mourir translates to I Want you to die. Regardless, Thank you for the passionate review, and the offer. I'm glad I came to this site and met someone like you. It truly does help me/encourage me to become a better writer. thank you so much Frieda.

[Frieda P]

I wasn't going to say which site just in case you had bird stalkers. ;-) Yes, I got the 'want to die' after I left your old site. You're so welcome, really enjoy your writing, you put a lot of gusto into your poetry.

[songstress]

well it's fine, that's why I changed my name... I'm sorry I'm Just used to fending people off regarding my writing hence this. And I'd very much so, appreciate it if you and I kept this between one another :)

[Frieda P]

Ha mum's the word...I doubt anyone else read this on live feed..... ;-)