Gifted or Cursed?

Gifted or Cursed?

A Poem by wthz freestylen
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UHHHM im gifted not cursed just remember that

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Listen the dude is rude, but when hes speaking hes pretty decent
SOME say hes a lyrical god they feel that hes sent.
From what we have reasons,to believe in. but aren't sure is is there
But not aren't sure they fear
That's its not a gift, its a curse,
and they hear demons when hes speaking, in every verse
But some still say to PRAISE ME
and say that i SAVED THE
life of unspoken words.
someones who's  spoken the chosen words,
when hes rhyming his vocal cords,
our battling Nobel wars
Take a noone and show him, the rythem with in him
or give him a vision of the hardest guitarist's CHOSEN CORDS
That the missions our of a higher alliance, trying to stay alive in which
is from that of a CONTROLLED WORLD
Some scream to reach for your neighbors,
Get the preachers, to say the
Holy announcement,
they shout it,
as they perform a exorcism
they say this expert ism, has to be that of what sets with in him
so demand what ever cursed him,
or presence in him, to come forth or exit with him..
But were suppose to live in fear of losing our souls to the devil's kitchen?
I suppose im sitting in his dina chair,
with a spliff a beer, and the rest of his left ova chicken
simple people keep sitting here while the rest of us living

 

© 2010 wthz freestylen


Author's Note

wthz freestylen
not edited or whole version of song/ poem rap we

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This one actually makes a reasonable amount of sense, though there are still quite a few parts that read strangely. I don't really know what else to say considering I'm not exactly a critic when it comes to poetry.
The reason your not getting reviews is because nobody knows about your work. Review people (politely, I might add) and your review will show on their wall for all their friends to see and they'll read your profile and review you. It's a give and get kind of system, see? The better the reviews you give the better the reviews you get. There's not much else to it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.




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this is good. looks like you made some effort here and put some thought into this piece. ur a budding poet and will only get better. good job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

wicked

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I listen to rap and hip hop and there was great lyrics in there but I think it must flow better I had a hard time imagining it as a song should have a better structure to get your message across/story/rap. But then again it's a rough as you noted.good job fave line
"someones who's spoken the chosen words,
when hes rhyming his vocal cords,"


Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This one actually makes a reasonable amount of sense, though there are still quite a few parts that read strangely. I don't really know what else to say considering I'm not exactly a critic when it comes to poetry.
The reason your not getting reviews is because nobody knows about your work. Review people (politely, I might add) and your review will show on their wall for all their friends to see and they'll read your profile and review you. It's a give and get kind of system, see? The better the reviews you give the better the reviews you get. There's not much else to it.

Posted 13 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

PLEASE FUCKIGN REVIEW ILL NVER KNOIW ANYTHING BOUT MY S**T I NOONE EVER REVIEWS!

Posted 13 Years Ago



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wthz freestylen
wthz freestylen

Austin, TX



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Uhh 1st off If i spit ya, BETTA OFF, stepn back might Cetcha COUGH, im sick.. listen i just found this site i freestyle thats about me.. more..

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