Change

It's all about pain, abandonment, sadness--it's all about the change.

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The world went on spinning, uncaring

And this little girl stood alone, shaking

People walked in and out like careless wanderers

Each faces were nothing but strangers

And this little girl shuddered, scared

'Cause she knew that no one cared

And life is a path of endless pain

Grief is what there is to gain

And it's hard to trust, to hope and to love

When those hardened hearts held no love

The world would always remain as it is

And loving is but an unreachable bliss

And yet she has learned to love at all cost

Though everything ended with but a bitter loss

And it's always the heart that breaks the most

And it's always the change that hurts the most

And so her mask has crumbled and faded

Revealing the innocence, now dead

And it's always the change that hurts the most. 

Author's Note

What do you think? It's a poem I wrote for my creative writing class, but I ended up not passing this. I have no idea why it turned out to be like this, but oh well... Tell me what you think of it. I'll appreciate any kind of feedback. ^___^

Reviews

[Storyteller of Dimensio..]

This sure is a great work. It has all the things I like to talk about (masks, change, loss, abandonment, pain, etc.).
There are so many truths in this like: "it's hard to trust, to hope and to love" or "And it's always the heart that breaks the most
And it's always the change that hurts the most"
Also about the world remaining continuing to go on, being the same, yet changing with the changes hurting the most. Change does hurt, but it's one of the basics and certainties in life. Everything remains the same, yet not so same.
"And life is a path of endless pain"

[Kon™]

Well I like this :) I though it was very creative, and very sad/sorrowful. I like the couplets, with your rhyming and all ^_^ Also that phrase 'it's always the change that hurts the most', in a short sentence, it means alot. Great job with this one :)