In Silence

In Silence

by

Jose M. Euvin

 

 

Sleeping in silence

Screaming inside

 

Wish you could hear me

So

I can open my eyes

 

The cups are filled

With tears I shed

 

Scream of depression

While lying in bed

 

The night is immense

And

Sour are the tears

 

The silence amends

The worst of my fears

 

Can one really live

When life is a dream

 

Can I really expect

For you to hear my screams

 

The heart's really silent

When there's nothing left

 

It's hard to feel anything

With the calling of death

 

Reviews

[Querida]

The sheer emotion in this piece is what strikes me as the most inviting. You can nearly feel and hear this girl as she screams for release. Your flow is amazing, if a teensy bilt stilted. Personally, I believe this enhances the read. How can one create amazing, smooth rhythms when life itself does not work that way?

I truly found beauty in this pice of art.

[Haden]

"The silence amends
The worse of my fears"
... this was my favorite line! (even though it should be "worst" not "worse") The work is beautiful angst! we've all been here, you make the reader afraid, for the writer who seems to be so sad, and for ourselves because we can all relate to this feeling. very solid piece! phenomenal emotion!

[yinseriv]

This is a well thought out poem with something to say. I have known that silence of the the heart with the coming of death. The silence allowed my soul to hear.

[Kelsmiles]

This poem made me want to reach my hand out and wake you from your dreams.

[echo]

This definitely had a flow. Accepting the inevitable is always hard. You want to scream out for help, for someone else to rescue you from an understanding, that can only hurt. Your poem talks about fear and frustration, and does a very good job of it.

[Lj Muñoz]

I like the dark and tormenting flow... Great writing...

[SPINNING ON that dizzy ..]

What a desperate cry we have here. To be held in this world be it a minute, a day or a lifetime is too too long.... The writing is so very much like a prayer or a plea to be understood.... The heart's really silent when there's nothing left.... this says so much to me - it breaks mine and holds it hostage....

Kath

[['tatiz speis]]

As always, you pack a powerful punch with the meter of the rhytm and words. Love your work, always!

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To me this piece speaks of the helpless feeling of having to hold everything within unable to tell what is happening to them when they know they should be shouting it aloud to all but are trapped from doing so. It is a terrible feeling and you have described it well. Whatever it means to each reader all can relate, as is reflected in your glowing reviews. Best wishes, Bethlynne.

[RollingThunder02]

Aside from a few misspellings, this is really good. The rhyme and flow are excellent!
:o)

[pal]

"Sleeping in silence;Screaming inside"
"Wish you could hear me;So;I can open my eyes"

lovely poem very sweetly expressed..
pal