Good Enough

Good Enough

By

Jose M. Euvin

 

 

I’m never gonna be good enough for you

The pain you left

You can’t undo

Even though it hurts inside

You will never see me cry

 

Perfections not for me!

Was it so hard for you to see?

Like a soldier I stand tall

Even though my heart you’ve torn

 

My skies have darken

The rain pores down

My soul is broken

The pain resides

 

I can’t see the light ahead

And

Still you don’t understand

 

My hearts in pieces

You should’ve said no

It was all a game

You never loved

 

You could had stopped the pain

Now life will never be the same

 

“I never really loved you”

Was the last I ever heard!

All I wanted was to hold you

Yet my love you pushed away

 

 

Reviews

[Brette Medb]

The rhyme started out strong only to taper off and then suddenly become sporadic or vacant... the overall writing was good but if you choose to begin with rhyme it should stay that way... that's just my opinion but enough about that. The poem was pretty good.


Brette

[Queen of the Damned]

Wow this just about brought a tear to my eyes. Another great write where the emotions pour from your words. I do agree with helen that if you start with a rhyme scheme, you should try to follow through with it. But I still loves this piece anyways. It still holds its powerful saddness right to the ends.

[Lady Luck]

The rhyme seems to randomly appear and disappear. You may want to work on that. Other then that, you did a really jod way of showing your emotions and all of that.

[Natalie C]

You could have stopped the pain
Now life will never be the same

Seems like one's life will always be filled with 'what if's' and sadly there is nothing we can do about it. In the end love stays a game where only the fittest survives. One needs to fail sometimes to really appreciate what you have in the end.
A great piece, which just seemed to tuck at the heartstrings

[Helen Woodward]

Hi,
If you're going to rhyme you need to carry it through or at least do every second stanza. there are no hard and fast rules, but I just think that it reads better. Your expression is vivid, there is no guesswork attached, your subject is clear, I hope it's fiction...if not...it's sad.
Helen :)

[Jess: ~The Sidekick~]

Wonderful piece to describe being broken-hearted.

[Tessa Anne]

wow. yet again, you manage to blow my mind with the whole, "ow you broke my heart again" poems. lol i did like it alot. it really makes you wonder though, why so many poems about a broken heart?

[James Mayfield]

The rhyme scheme starts to falter after the second stanza and there was a problem with the sixth stanza (You could have instead of could had). Aside from that though the piece was very good. I enjoyed the pace of it and imagery was done rather well. Thanks for sharing.

[Ladysue]

An excellent expression of love lost in this piece. I think many will relate to this. It is so sad and I am sorry you are going through this. You captured this feeling of emotions beautifully!!! Great write.

[*~* Anna Marie *~*]

this is strong...u do a good job...=]

[Mary E. Green]

Wow... awesome...