The Girl Behind The Curtain

The Girl Behind The Curtain
by
Jose M. Euvin

She hides behind that screen
Not wanting to be seen

Her feelings are protected
My heart she has neglected

She's the girl behind the curtain
Scared to be rejected

My heart she holds at hand
Scared to let me in

The girl behind the curtain
My heart she has forsaken

How I've loved the girl behind the curtain
Even though our eyes will never meet
My heart she took from me

Reviews

[Rainbow Rider]

A beautiful, from the heart, write of both self love and pain, precieved happiness and sorrow.

One thing though, the two times you wrote 'Scare' it feels to me you wanted and should have said 'Scared', but forgot the 'd'.

Also in the last set, the word 'love' should be 'loved', if you meant that you have loved her. Otherwise, if you are saying you want to love her, then you would want to change the word 'I've' to 'I'd'. It works both ways, just depends on how you intended it to read.

Thanks for the read request, this was an insightful read. ,,,,Mhk Melvin

Beautifully written though, tender and wrenching at the same time

[Sianna Reader]

Truly heart wrenching. A fear of getting too close to someone you may grow to care for...an interesting theme, or at leasts that's how I interperated it. Beautifully written with a simple flowing rhythm. I liked it very much.

Sianna xxx

[Ladysue]

Nice flow. sad, but nicely written...

[jOHN]

very good and beautiful.

[Tallulah]

thats so sweet and heart breaking. i love your rhythm and the poem really flowed well together. great job i really enjoyed this.

[Ethan Paz]

well done. nice imagery and good use of words.