Broken

Broken

A Poem by EnternalNight
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Something I wrote a long time ago

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Crack
Another line down my heart
Rip
Trying to mend my mind
Shake
Trying to hide my tears
Shatter
My heart shatters
Breath
I need to calm down
Tears
I can't stop the tears
Smile
I hide my broken heart
Laugh
I can't let them see
Broken
How truly hurt I am
Forward
It's the only thing I can do...

© 2011 EnternalNight


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i love it good job!

Posted 9 Years Ago


Sometimes moving forward is all we can do when we can no longer be with the person we love. It may never feel the way it did with that person but love will come again in time. This poem expresses all of those harsh emotions we go through after a parting and we do try to hide the hurt from the world around us.

Posted 9 Years Ago


I agree with Angelina. This was awesome. I love the idea of like an action then a description. You did an awesome job of this.
Your poem is pretty sad though :( Good though,

Posted 9 Years Ago


i love poems like this where the action is presented before the description! wonderfully written! i like this one! genius work!

Posted 9 Years Ago


very nice work, good flow to it

Posted 9 Years Ago


AH, I like this one.

Posted 9 Years Ago



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Added on December 31, 2010
Last Updated on September 13, 2011
Tags: Crack, Rip, Shatter, tears, heart, breath, smile, hurt, sorrow, sad, broken

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