Butterflies

June 5, 1994

A woman,
no longer the child of moments before,
departs the bedroom
with a last
longing
look
over her bare shoulder.
She has no regrets.
Only a feeling of
emptiness
where there should have been
love.

Reviews

[Emily Rose]

This is simple, but incredibly powerful and its simplicity and brevity give it that power. The image is well-wrought, but incomplete, and the empty space that you don't tell us anything in does more for the poem than any words that you could have said. The ideas that you bring up in this poem - the significance of virginity, the end of innocence, etc. - are subtle, yet still well stated, so it really makes me think. This is a really amazing work and you should be proud of it. Thank you for sharing. (fAlso, please forgive me if I sound like I'm rambling - it's 2:30 and I'm getting sleepy.)

[Fran Marie]

A short powerful and well crafted piece,here, what you don't write

speaks more to the reader than what is written ~ very cleverly presented

and well expressed~Fran Marie

[Emily B]

Each word and pause proves its place in the whole. A skillfully crafted piece of work.