moving day

moving day

A Poem by yvo miki

boxes,boxes and more boxes

rooms that where once full now empty

friends that where once happy now are sad

tears are falling as my moving truck drives away

saying goodbye is not easy

a life I was comfortable with is now gone

"what now"i think to myself as I lye in bed

now lying on a pillow soked in my tears

not sure how to make friends ,don't know if its

worth it anymore.

 

lonely in a new place full of unknown people

I feel my heart broken

I want my old life back

I sit in my room thinking of how

ill never hear my friends laughter again

or hear her silly stories

or see her beautiful art

 

my friends I will miss yall more

than I can put in words

yall have held me together

kept me sane

I will be lost without yall

 

 

© 2015 yvo miki


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This is quite relatable in how many of us have had to move and this were separated from our friends. It sounds like you wrote this out of recent experience so I hope you're doing good in your new home. Perhaps you've even met new friends, but if not then I hope you do. As for your poem, you did good at expressing the sadness that ishe felt when moving. There are some nice, relatable lines in there, like "I sit in my room, thinking of how, I'll never hear my friends' laughter again." I just think you could word some of these better. Like those lines could become: 'I lie on my old bed, now in my new room, as I try to realize, I will never hear, my friends laughter again.' Also at the end I think you should lay off on the word 'y'all.' I know you use that word frequently but 'you' would work a lot better. I think you should just change the first and last ones to 'you', but the second should be 'y'all held' rather than 'y'all have held.' It just sounds better. All in all it's a good poem but it needs improvement

Posted 5 Years Ago


Im sorry Yvo Miki.. I really am.. I wish you the best about you moving..

You will have friends because I am one of your friends.. im always gonna be here for you.. you can message me everyday on ere if you want.. im always on here.. LOL..

Anyways.. That was a great poem that came form the heart.. keep up the good work!!

Posted 5 Years Ago


i wrote a poem here because for some reason it wont let me post a poem

Posted 5 Years Ago



OLD FRIENDS


i know for sure now that i'm sliping away from yalls minds
people i once called friends now saying they are starting to for get me
i can feel the pain rising in my heart
saddness that they will once not know who i am
already forgetting my name and what my smile looks like
what color my eyes are
what i like and dont like

Posted 5 Years Ago


Luna Chan

5 Years Ago

yeah I hope. check your read request. yeah one is about you and I feel bad now.
yvo miki

5 Years Ago

its okay ill read it
yvo miki

5 Years Ago

dalton holt -thanks for the adivce im glad u like it
I agree.
"my friends I will miss yall more
than I can put in words
yall have held me together
kept me sane
I will be lost without yall"
New places are scary and a adventure. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry and thoughts.
Coyote





Posted 5 Years Ago


yvo miki

5 Years Ago

aww thanks
Coyote Poetry

5 Years Ago

You are welcome.
happy travels friend

but wherever you go, keep your pen at heart


-Dream

Posted 5 Years Ago


It does suck to move and start over. So many new opportunities yet you miss so much of the normalcy in life. Awesome wording I enjoyed it :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


There was really only one friend I had growing up, Victoria. And that was Brett. But I need never worry about moving. My Dad bought the house years ago and - well, it's still there today.

But reading your heartfelt poem does remind me of school. And yes, you leave one school to join another and you do feel you're going to miss others, although in my case it was I was going to miss the teachers as I was closer to them than the students.

Yet - that's life. Out with the old, in with the new. Good air in, bad air out. I think that's why when we are so confused with our emotions at times we SIGH to enable this very action of self-healing. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


Awww~ I know whats it's like moving and its sh*t but i found new friends and I kept in touch with my old ones.

I hope where ever you're going you'll have fun and make new mates >w

Posted 5 Years Ago


yvo miki

5 Years Ago

ya sucks a*s lol but I will still be on here
Kurai.Merodi

5 Years Ago

yay, that's good then
yvo miki

5 Years Ago

hahah ya im happy here
yvo i love u more than u know sweetie. i will miss u greatly and im crying as i read this because there will always be pain. no one will ever replace u and u know that! u are the best friend i could have asked for. we've literally been through h*** and back but in the end, we made it. even though im crying they are tears of joy and sadness because im happy for u and yet sad to see u go.

Posted 5 Years Ago


yvo miki

5 Years Ago

explain what
Luna Chan

5 Years Ago

check hangouts and u will see.
yvo miki

5 Years Ago

okay i got it !!!!!!!!!!!

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yvo miki
yvo miki

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I have a boyfriend and would love yall to understand im happy now!!!!! I don't want anyone to be my friend because of what ive been through but because im nice and loving ,kind-hearted and idk .. more..

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