Broken Heart

A boy lost his new shoes when he visited a sacred place to say his prayer

The boy walks home with his bare feet.

His head is down as he moves bit by bit.

He went to a sacred place to say his prayer.

He did not know what he would get there.

He said his prayer in the best manner.

He thought all his life would be better.

He finished his prayer with earnest tears,

Then he hoped to go home with his peers.

When he reached the spot of the sacred place,

The boy failed to find the shoes or their trace.

He felt very bad as he lost a precious thing of own,

He bought the pair for the festival coming soon.

He was at a loss, what he would do then.

He headed towards home with his men.

Pebbles and rough road hurt him much,

He was so emotional, that nothing could touch.

His peers comforted him again and again,

Nothing could stop his internal pain.

Tears swelled up his eyes like flash flood,

Broken glass caused bare feet to spurt blood.

Somebody stole his new shoes in a short time,

He has fled away with them committing crime.

The boy weeps as he walks slowly with peers,

His broken heart is flooded with nonstop tears.

 

 

Reviews

[Corset]

It is true, our carelessness and selfish needs can unwittingly cause great pain to another, the thief's feet no longer spurt blood, but the unknown victim who left his shoes outside will grieve his loss...and the thief will not know of his pain or inconsolable sorrow. When someone steals from me, I comfort myself knowing they obviously needed the shoes enough to steal them then they must need them more than I.

[zainul]

Thank you Corset for your amazing review and very convincing explanations.
I agree with your well thought points.
Thanks for the mind blowing observations from the stand point of the thief and the victim.

[zainul]

Thanks for your admiring review.
Your points make sense.
I agree with them.
Best regards,
Zainul

[Eric Cox]

It always hurts when bad people steal from someone, leaves a kinda hole sometimes.
The descriptions here are good, makes a person know what the boy felt. Nicely penned.

[zainul]

You are very correct ,Eric.
When the stealth hurts a little boy it causes immense pain and torment.
Thanks for your lovely compliments and admiring review.

[Eric Cox]

You're welcome.

[Priscilla Sayers]

How sad. My heart aches for the little boy depicted in his internal struggles. Nicely done!

[zainul]

Thank you,Priscilla for the sympathy for the little boy.
Your amazing review is appreciated much.

[Priscilla Sayers]

You are very welcome.

[zainul]

Thanks for the nice gesture.

[pumpkin head]

such a sad write, well expressed

[zainul]

Thanks for the inspiring review.

[EMMIE]

Heart wrenching and so melancholy. You are a great story teller in this poem, very interesting.

[zainul]

Thank you, Emmie for your lovely compliments and great review.

[EMMIE]

Yup! And thank you for making my Stolen Goods your fave =)

[zainul]

Thank you,dear friend.I was going to write my review.
It is a wonderful piece.
I have to listen to the song you referred.

[EMMIE]

Thanks. It's a haunting deep song

[zainul]

Thank you once again.I have found the song and started to listen.
This is sad and awesome.

[EMMIE]

Exactly!

[Sheila Kline]

Oh how sad for the little boy, but he shall surely be even more blessed for the pain he had to endure as a result of his sacred time of prayer.
A heartfelt write!!

[zainul]

Thank you Sheila for your admiring review.
You have correctly said that the little boy should surely be even more blessed for the pain he had to endure as a result of his sacred time of prayer.
Thanks for the compassionate observation.
Your review inspires me immensely.