Goldfish

Goldfish can bring you happiness

Graceful goldfish swims

Like   elegant    butterfly

Beauty captures heart

Author's Note

Watch the video to enjoy the beauty of goldfish
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=n42YzuSVvSs&feature=relmfu

Reviews

[Sheila Kline]

Oh, the image is so very lovely! I think the butterfly is one of God's most beautiful creations, and the goldfish is always so very graceful as it moves in the waters...colors so vibrant, so attention getting - surely enough of the two to capture one's heart!
Thank you for sharing!!

[zainul]

Thanks for the very admiring review.
I am very impressed and inspired.

[ShelleyA]

A lovely write that is short, concise and succinct. Excellent use of brevity. Delightful imagery. You paint a vivid picture that readers can appreciate. Very nice simile. I love how you express the gracefulness through comparison. Good depth of feeling. Good word choice. Nice alliteration. Well penned. Write on.

[zainul]

Thank you Shelley for the wonderful review.
I am very glad to read your analysis.
Your expertise in reviewing impressed me.
Thanks for stopping by to grace the piece.

[ShelleyA]

You're welcome, zainul and my pleasure.

[s y e]

Simple yet so beautiful! I loved the comparison. Well written!

[zainul]

Thank you sweet friend for the wonderful review.

[s y e]

Your very welcome my dear.

[ms. barrie]

your words very much captured the vivid imagery of the similarities between the gracefulness of a butterfly and the goldfish. how watching both of them puts a smile upon faces. beautiful write, thanks for sharing :)

[zainul]

Thank you Barrie for the wonderful review.
The similarities between the gracefulness of a butterfly and the
goldfish inspired me to write this piece.
In fact,when you will see goldfish in aquarium you may experience
amazing feelings which may encourage you to write lovely pieces.

[ms. barrie]

yes, i think it's one of the reasons dentists put aquariums in their waiting rooms, because goldfish (fish) tends to calms one's nerves down a bit. this is a very endearing write,and your captured the subject matter with your usual enchanting eloquent writing style! Namaste!

[zainul]

Thanks for the lovely comment.
You have mentioned a very interesting information about goldfish that it tends to calms one's nerves down a bit.I appreciate your observation regarding use of goldfish in aquarium in the waiting rooms of the dentists.

[ms. barrie]

well i'm not 100% accurate but watching them swim around "like butterflies" in water does tend to calm my nerves down a bit, that and deep breathing, when having to visit the dentist. or maybe a lot of dentists are fond of goldfish? :)

[zainul]

There must be some relationship.
I will check it.
Thanks for the wonderful point to ponder.

[ms. barrie]

you welcome, it's just my personal opinion :)

[zainul]

I understand my sweet friend.
We can share any idea.
We do it for learning and entertainment.
Feel free to share any idea.

[Tate Morgan]

They do seem to fly ion the water

[zainul]

Yea,they do seem to fly in the water.
Thanks for the nice review.

I am extremely sorry for the delay to reply.
I am not sure how I failed to find your review.

[zainul]

Those fins are flying, loved this!

Amazing again, and delightful!
Full of freedom!

E.L.

[zainul]

Adore your wonderful review.
Yes,those fins are flying,
I'm glad that you loved it.
read moreAdore your wonderful review.
Yes,those fins are flying,
I'm glad that you loved it.

Missed the lovely review posted 1 month ago.
I am extremely sorry for the delay to reply.

You're welcome Zainul always a pleasure, don't worry.

[zainul]

Thanks for the generosity.
Hope you are well now.

Always :)

[de_maruf]

lekha matro tin line kintu onekdur porjonto onuvuto hocce.
olpo kothar lekha posondo na tobe ata valo legese

[zainul]

dhonnobad

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I really like this Zainul! Because I've always thought goldfish are such amazing creatures created by God. I've always had fish tanks filled with fish and snails. I miss keeping them, they added more character to my room. It's short but yet so much imagery is presented that it's worth more! Though when I was reading it the second line seems a little off. Like maybe the wording should be different like "Like an elegant butterfly". Beautifully written! Keep up the good work :)

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[zainul]

Thank you Ashley for the superb review and great suggestions.
I feel proud to be able to peep into your fish tanks.
More interesting is your idea of God and Goldfish.
This inspired me a lot.
I will check if an may be added before elegant.
Perhaps I was very rigid about the syllable count.
Thanks for the lovely suggestion.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're very welcome! :) To me I don't like the poems that have certain syllable limit on each line. Haha. For one, because those aren't particularly my talent. Second, poetry shouldn't give you a limit on what to write. But I do think you done a lovely job :)

[zainul]

You are a symbol of inspiration,my dear friend.
Your smile is as powerful as your lovely words to energize me to write another poem.
But,what can I do?
There are very strict reviewers around us.They do not spare any wrong,slip of pen,US or British spelling and innocent humor!
I hope you can feel my problem.
Please stay in touch.
Best luck!

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Thank you very much and I'm glad that you think I'm an inspiration! :)
Yeah I can feel your problem and I'll stay in touch. Best luck to you too.

[zainul]

Really,I do think you as an inspiration :)
Thanks for your nice gesture.

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

I'm glad that you think so. :)
And you're very welcome, Zainul.

[zainul]

I feel very very proud to have a friend like you :)
Would you please allow me to write a poem about you?

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Same to you! :)
And sure, you're a writer and free to write whatever you feel like writing about :)

[zainul]

Thank you for granting me the freedom to write a poem :)
It is 03.00 am here.
Would you please allow me to sleep now?
I hope to sit at the computer tomorrow morning again.
We had a very lovely sharing for the whole time
I enjoyed too much
Hope you also have the same feeling

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Haha yeah :) It's 4:00 p.m. over here. And yes the feeling's mutual.

[zainul]

So good bye for now.
See you soon :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Yeah, and alright :)

[Eric Cox]

Imagery touched by beauty. A pleasing senryu. Excellent write.

[zainul]

Thank you Eric for the adorable compliments and superb review.

[Eric Cox]

You're welcome.

[Karen Preston]

lovely

[zainul]

Thanks for the impressive review.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Simple yet oh so elegant and beautiful! I love your comparison. Well written!

[zainul]

Thank you,Whitney.
Your review makes me happy.
Love your work,they are wonderful.

[Whitney Kleinhuizen]

Thank you so much! I look forward to reading more of yours.

[zainul]

This is my pleasure.
Thanks a lot.