For me, nursery rhymes are more about word play than meaning. It's all in the cadence. The words should bump each other along... as yours do here. Mix in some alliteration, but don't force it.
It's all about pleasing the little ears inside your head.
You're well on your way. Well done!
Posted 11 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you Mic for the inspiring words.
I appreciate your wonderful review.
I will concen.. read moreThank you Mic for the inspiring words.
I appreciate your wonderful review.
I will concentrate on this genre soon as children may like them.
this is a very enchanting nursery rhyme, your words and rhymes, evoke lyrical pensiveness. i could almost hear one singing this to their child, a bedtime lullaby. brilliant write! thanks for sharing, and thank you for reviewing "Writer's Block" - Namaste!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you Barrie for filling my morning with joy(we have morning in Bangladesh now!)
Yes,I asp.. read moreThank you Barrie for filling my morning with joy(we have morning in Bangladesh now!)
Yes,I aspire to be a nursery rhyme writer.I feel very happy to think children are going to sleep with the bedtime lullaby.
I hope to come back soon to your wonderful writes.
Best wishes,
Zainul
11 Years Ago
aw thank you, your writings are very enlightening and put a smile on my face. and i think you achiev.. read moreaw thank you, your writings are very enlightening and put a smile on my face. and i think you achieved that aspiration. feel free to come back and visit my profile anytime. And you do the same for me as well, regarding filling my mornings (yay you have mornings now!) with joy also! Namaste!
11 Years Ago
I feel your lovely gesture across the great distance between us.
I am very blessed to have a w.. read moreI feel your lovely gesture across the great distance between us.
I am very blessed to have a wonderful friend like you.
Have nice time from one morning to another morning :)
Namaste!
aw, i feel the same way about you. You radiant positive light that draws one in, and you're writings.. read moreaw, i feel the same way about you. You radiant positive light that draws one in, and you're writings are inspiring and i find comfort in your encouraging words you share with everyone on here. it's lovely to read, you also, my friend! Namaste to you also!
11 Years Ago
Thank for the very lovely compliments.
See you soon.
I love this, it has the perfect sing song quality to be a nursery rhyme, I would would read this to a little girl at bedtime!
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
I am very pleased to read your inspiring review.
Please let me know the little girl responds.<.. read moreI am very pleased to read your inspiring review.
Please let me know the little girl responds.
I adore your amazing support.
very nice,,i like the grumpy and lovely both,,,like trying t woo a little miss grumpy out of her grumpiness,,,lol,,,but sorry to say, not crazy about the political reference in a child's poem..hell, i don't even like political stuff for myself...(4 more days, ,,, sigh)
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thanks for your admiring review.
I will soon eliminate the political reference.
Adore yo.. read moreThanks for your admiring review.
I will soon eliminate the political reference.
Adore your lovely contribution.
I really do enjoy this... I have no credibility to constructively criticize; but I love the word play
Posted 11 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thanks for your wonderful review.
I feel that your criticism is highly constructive.
Eng.. read moreThanks for your wonderful review.
I feel that your criticism is highly constructive.
Engage more time in reading and reviewing the works of other writers.
This will help you a lot.
Best wishes :)
whimsical and fancy free. lovely. nursery rhymes are intended for children so use subject matter which is attractive to a child and employ cute rhymes in the ABAB
format. fantasy and fun.....
Thank you for the wonderful guidance and review.
I have to work hard to be able to write nurse.. read moreThank you for the wonderful guidance and review.
I have to work hard to be able to write nursery rhymes.
I admit it requires serious attention and perseverance to reach the hearts of children.
They can't be served anything as caprice.
11 Years Ago
child fantasy is innocence and wonder, indeed not easy to capture.
11 Years Ago
Yes,I agree with you, dear friend.
Thanks for your lovely guidance.
Nice and cute lines..however for a nursery rhyme dont you think it could be a bit more simple?
Posted 11 Years Ago
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11 Years Ago
Yes,Arielle.I agree with you.
I will try to make it simple later.
Thanks for the complim.. read moreYes,Arielle.I agree with you.
I will try to make it simple later.
Thanks for the compliments and lovely review.
For me, nursery rhymes are more about word play than meaning. It's all in the cadence. The words should bump each other along... as yours do here. Mix in some alliteration, but don't force it.
It's all about pleasing the little ears inside your head.
You're well on your way. Well done!
Posted 11 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
11 Years Ago
Thank you Mic for the inspiring words.
I appreciate your wonderful review.
I will concen.. read moreThank you Mic for the inspiring words.
I appreciate your wonderful review.
I will concentrate on this genre soon as children may like them.