Little boat

This little boat, having weathered a violent storm,
bobs on the gentle, glassy swell.
Sails still furled, she is drifting languidly
with the current
to nowhere in particular.

Reviews

[Firebird]

Your words really give the impression of a peaceful voyage and the sounds are lovely to read aloud. The sounds of the second line are hard and harsh like a real storm and the third line bounces as you say it like the boat is really bobbing. I really like it and I'm glad your voyage that day was calm and relaxed.

[Zugzwang]

Glad you liked it. I'm really wanting to write more nice poems. They've all been dark and vitriolic lately. Oh well, that's where I'm at I suppose. I need to go for a long, long run.

[Gabriel Enrique Montano]

Through your word choice and the impression I received, this poem saddened me.
I quite enjoyed it; I feel that at one time, I could relate to this little boat which suffered the wake of the storm and with no destination ahead.
Thank you.

[Zugzwang]

Thanks Gabriel. Well, I think it's a universal human experience. I, for one, am grateful for the times after the storms have passed. I'm pleased the poem spoke to you and that it gave you enjoyment.

[WerTherBeDragons]

Ahhh...very relaxing in both the words, rhythm & imagery that you use & conjure. I'm 'chilled-out' now - Thank you :-)

[Zugzwang]

You're welcome! Glad you enjoyed it.

[Philip Muls]

Very peaceful, nice imagery. Less is more.

I like it.

[Zugzwang]

Thanks, Philip. Yes, it described a peaceful moment for me. And it certainly is short!! I'm glad you liked it.

[Carbon Muse]

The feeling of being adrift in the sea of life, no destination, no direction ... weathering storm after storm, just existing.

Such is my life ... and I could not have described it any better ...

[Zugzwang]

Thanks Carbon. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

[Alexanda Corrin]

I very much like the contrast between what would've been the violent turbulence of a storm and the calm releif that follows it. Very well written!

[Zugzwang]

Thank you Alexandra. I'm pleased you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review!

[terry smith]

Nice!! Zen and the art of boating.

[Zugzwang]

Or boating and the art of Zen?
Thanks for the review!

[terry smith]

zen is the art of peaceful calm....there is a book zen and the art of motorcycle maintenance....I just took the liberty of making it about a boat:)

[Zugzwang]

Yar, it was by Pirsig if my memory serves correctly. I didn't get very far...found it a little boring (not much of a motorbike person).

[alifeacoustic]

I can picture observing this as it all unfolds. Violence replaced with stillness, and the little boat just gets on with what's thrown at it. Or maybe she is waiting, ready for the next challenge.

[Zugzwang]

Yar, the little boat was pretty chilled when I wrote this. Who knows what the weather will being?