You were probably just typing really fast. It's so hard to keep the mental flow going along while also being conscious of mistakes. Sometimes I make some real winners myself. I personally have killed the English language on many occasion.
No...not the cupboard! LOL. Ouch, I'm sure that hurt. Are you in pain now? You are more then welcomed. I look forward to seeing more of your work. If you write that good under duress, I could only imagine how good you are without the pain.-Catrina
Thanks for your review.
That would make it more interesting, if the both characters were just one, i.e. the narrator...it wasn't intended that way, but it's an idea.
I worried that that line would seem like information for reviewers, but what it means is that none of the chaos mentioned has happened, it's just the narrator being carried away by their daydreams (and at 16 i would get nervous unless a few lines rhymed, which is why it's phrased that way - do you think i should re-word, or remove completely?)
Thanks again for a helpful review.
I was wondering how long it would take someone to ask about the word "crozzled". Honestly, I'm not sure if it's truly a word or not. I saw it for the first time in Cormac McCarthy's writing and instantly fell in love with it, real or not.
Thanks for the review of Mother, Mother, Murder Me. I have certainly considered that line and am going to play around with it some more. Like all things I write, "Indeed there will be time for a thousand visions and revisions before the taking of toast and tea," TS Eliot. Constrictive critique is always appreciated over here...
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