Cliché

"A women's place is at home"

Cliché

 

Dreams, are what fill her empty nights

Nights which would otherwise have no life

The dream to work,

           Dream to travel,

                   Dream to see the world

But stuck in here she is,

Bound in cement and bricks

With curtains shading every ray of hope

But still some enter from deep beneath

With the radio her only companion

As she waits for her children

The cliché of life has dug deep beneath

Deep in her soul for being what she is,

A woman

But she shall fight

For her daughter shouldn’t…..

                                  - Ahena MK 

 

Reviews

[POETIC SOUL 2013]

This is profoundly deep and emotional. Makes a man Appreciate woman's sacrifice more and makes the reader relate to your circumstance. Excellent piece.

[Ahena MK]

thank you !!!

[Rita L. Sev]

Years ago, there were so few choices for women. Today, home is a valid choice, but certainly not the only one. This is a good piece that voices the frustration of those women who don't see the possibilities...

[Ahena MK]

Thanks for reading ...

[David Lewis Paget]

The lives of women in certain countries certainly leave a lot to be desired. Hopefully, as time passes, and democracy gains more of a foothold in authoritarian states, women may be able to come to the fore and express themselves without fear or favour. (That final 'women' (plural) should be 'woman' (singular)).

[Ahena MK]

why should the final woman not be women ? thanks for reading
ahena :)

[David Lewis Paget]

It's grammatically incorrect. You are using the plural instead of the singular. 'For being what she is, a woman', not 'for being what they are, women.'

[Ahena MK]

oh ok then ill change it ... and thanks for the info :)
ahena

[KeeD]

Curtains shading rays of hope, I really love this line.. :D

But she shall fight
For her daughter shouldn’t…..

beautiful, touching, brilliant.. I don't know what else to say but this speaks in volumes for itself.. It's great.

[Ahena MK]

thanks for reading
ahena

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

I can definitely sense the frustration and determination beneath these words. A sad poem indeed,

[Ahena MK]

thanks for reading

[Trace]

A world much different than what I am used to
however I know some women that feel like this in the states

Nicely written
Trace

[Ahena MK]

glad you liked it

[:o]

You penned this very well. The emotions within are clearly seen and felt. Good writing from you.

[Ahena MK]

thank you ..

[Praveeta]

You have depicted reality quite well, Ahena. It is sad to be see that this is still prevalent today.

[Ahena MK]

thank you...

[Praveeta]

You are most welcome.

[Giggling Star]

A very nice piece. Its how the world changes, little by little, over the generations.

[Ahena MK]

thankyou...

[Frieda P]

I hope we're not still stuck in that cliche in this era, but unfortunately some still feel this way. I never had a daughter, three sons...but I'm sure I'd teach her the same lessons, to treat all people equally. Nicely pen'd Ahena!

[Ahena MK]

grazie....