#YOU & ME!!

#YOU & ME!!

A Poem by anonymous_at

When there's a silence  between you and me
i think it speaks much aloud
but you  can't hear?!?
When there's silence between you and them 
you go wild and push hard to know.....
THEN  WHY CAN'T YOU HEAR MINE?!?

When i'm in pain and i need your help
but you can't see?!?
When they are in pain and need your help
you'll give all your best 
THEN WHY CAN'T YOU SEE MINE?!?

When i flash a smile at you
even though i'm dying inside
but you won't feel it?!?
when they flash a smile at you
and pretend that everythin's fine 
you can sense it.....you can feel it....
THEN WHY CAN'T YOU FEEL MINE?!?

Man,it's not that hard.......
it's just that,
both of us are makin' it hard.....
or may be we are incompatible .......

© 2017 anonymous_at



Author's Note

anonymous_at
i hope all of you like this piece of writing of mine nd would leave constructive reviews for my scope of improvement nd plz try to ignore grammatical errors!!!

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Strong flow of thoughts. You made the reader think about the statements written. The ending is correct. Maybe this person don't care about us and we must move on. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 6 Months Ago


anonymous_at

6 Months Ago

Thanks a lot :)..... Your reviews are quite helpful...
Coyote Poetry

6 Months Ago

I'm glad. Perfect flow of words. Don't mean, they are meaningful. Write what you feel. We can edit l.. read more
anonymous_at

6 Months Ago

Thanks for encouraging....it means a lot to me... :)
wow, nice piece anonymous.
i am new too, i hope you will take out time to help me out.
Trust me when i say this piece is nice!

Posted 10 Months Ago


anonymous_at

6 Months Ago

Thanks a lot for encouraging me...and sorry i have been very busy for last few months ....so i didn'.. read more
i can definitely relate to this one, you're amazing.

I'm new on here, so it would be an honour if you could review some of my poems!

Posted 10 Months Ago


anonymous_at

10 Months Ago

Thanks..... It's great to see that.... People can relate to my poem..... And ya for sure... I'll rev.. read more
I think this is a very relatable poem. Feeling like you're not noticed or not as important in a loved one's life can really hurt. I sense the tone of the poem as anger and shouting through your use of exclamation points. Well done, this is very nice. Just correct your words, like nd, u and all those. O like this

Posted 11 Months Ago


anonymous_at

11 Months Ago

thank you very much for your positive review and for taking out your time to read my poem.......and .. read more
Avia

11 Months Ago

It was my pleasure :)
anonymous_at

11 Months Ago

Well then thanks......... :)
Amazing work, I can relate to it.

Posted 11 Months Ago


anonymous_at

11 Months Ago

well...it's nice to hear that someone out there can relate it to..btw thnks a lot for ur review ...... read more
sometimes we take advantage of each other not really knowing

Posted 11 Months Ago


anonymous_at

11 Months Ago

Ya... But all I'm seeing is that she's getting more frnds nd is happy nd is no longer under depressi.. read more
 wordman

11 Months Ago

well i got some valium,,lol
anonymous_at

11 Months Ago

Great.... :)
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SKY
Strange a story between two hearts in love. But you portrait it very nice. Great one!

Posted 11 Months Ago


anonymous_at

11 Months Ago

Great then...
SKY

11 Months Ago

Great here....
anonymous_at

11 Months Ago

Lmao then...
i hope all of you like this piece of writing of mine nd would leave constructive reviews for the scope of my improvement :)

Posted 11 Months Ago



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Added on October 4, 2017
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voidness, void



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Well.. I'm 17 yrs old...i'm sick and tired of hiding my past... So i want it to be out there in front of everyone... Though you might find many grammatical errors.... So don't mock at them... Although.. more..

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