For Love

I got nineth place in a contest for this one with my previous account, but by far it is my favorite. I wrote it for my husband who was my boyfriend at the time.

Here before you I stand;

Opening up, putting my heart within your hand.

I look to you for joy and guidance;

You give it to me full, without a sideways glance.

I see within you who I want to be;

And you, in turn, see me, truly me.

I cannot tell how much I love you;

For no words will ever ring true.

I long to tell you all that I feel;

I want to live forever in those eyes of steel.

Just one touch and I melt within your arms;

Completely subdued by your loving and gentle charms.

No matter how far I fall;

I know your there to help me through it all.

From the night and through the day;

'Come what will,' I say.

For you are my life and love;

Our time together as pure as the whitest dove.

I feel you in the dark, caressing my fears away;

Gently turning my night into day.

Through all my trials and toils;

I found a love that never spoils.

You are my one and true;

I'll always want to do right by you.

Though these words are simple;

They are just a ripple;

Upon a ponds glassy top;

Of a love that will never stop.

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

I can see how someone would consider this as a worthy winner in a contest.
The words ring true, while the feelings of love and devotion are very well expressed.

The last 4 lines showcase the said devotion nicely.
"Though these words are simple;
They are just a ripple;
Upon a ponds glassy top;
Of a love that will never stop."

Good job.

[Brianna Brie]

I want to live forever in those eyes of steel.
Just one touch and I melt within your arms;
Completely subdued by your loving and gentle charms.
No matter how far I fall;
I know your there to help me through it all.
From the night and through the day;
'Come what will,' I say.
For you are my life and love;
Our time together as pure as the whitest dove.
I feel you in the dark, caressing my fears away;

Very lovely write. There are two descriptive details about love found in poems. The physical and personality characteristics we love about a person is one. While the other being how their love affects us. This poem nicely combines the two. Kudos!

[*Always be Me:)*]

aaawww i can relate to this with my baby. so beautiful. well done. :)

[Mauricio Montoya]

I’ve just met this girl so I can relate to this piece.
Great job well done.

[a_mystery]

"Of a love that will never stop."
its adorable.. specially these lines..
loved d poem..