Reason (1)

Principal : Ravi, why don't you want to go home during the vacations ?
Ravi: Sir , My step-mom lives there .
Principal : Does she hate you ? Does she beat you ?
Ravi: No Sir, She has other kids . My dad sired them .
Principal : But your Dad ...
Ravi: I know, sired me too . I can share Dad's wealth . In fact I can give away all of them. But I can't share my father .

Reviews

[Daydreamer]

Children understand the universe so much better than an adult. It is easier to share the wealth that you have the capabilities to earn on your own. But the love of a parent is a one time opportunity and not easily shared with another. There is enough sibling rivalry among children born to the same set of parents. We tend to forget if we betray our partner in marriage the children may also fear they will be cast aside for a child born of a differnt union. To a child being born first or last does not guarantee parental preference in the hierarchy of love. A trust is broken when the bloodlines are shared. Trust is a child's biggest security in knowing they are loved by a parent.
It takes writing skill to pack so much thought into so short a piece of word artwork.

[Anand Sehgal]

you have elaborated more than I could :) I am speechless dear

[Daydreamer]

A silent audience is death to an artist. It appears that you have captured the attention of yours and they are awaiting the next act.

[EloisaWrites]

Wow. This is one of the shortest screenplay I ever read but it surely narrates a whole story. I love the characters and the thought on this one. Great write. :)

[Anand Sehgal]

If possible I always try to keep it short . I'm always afraid my readers would get bored !

[EloisaWrites]

Haha. That is true. That is certainly one of the things we have to consider when we write. Well, you've succeeded in doing that here. :)

[icelandicblue]

Even in families we can become puzzle pieces that no longer fit. You've made an astute observation.

[Anand Sehgal]

Family is quite a complex thing in this post-modern world !

[smurfett]

Amazing what kids see and feel. They are so perceptive. To be so innocent and yet so insightful...Beautifully done..

[Anand Sehgal]

thank you so much Smurfett, have a good weekend. :)

[smurfett]

You too my friend =)

[The dark story]

Children are sensitive towards the love and affection they are getting.I agree with Lydia.
A very sweet and touching write!!

[Anand Sehgal]

Thank you so much dear Atiba

[Vani Jalagar]

this is an emotional screen play........a child's mind will be highly sensitive and very soon gets affected by happenings. thank you for share:)

[Anand Sehgal]

thanks a lot dear Vani for the review

[Lydia Shutter]

Such angst and turmoil for a child when there are other children sired by the same father. I think every child wants to feel he or she is special and if there are "two families" of children, often one set of children is favored over another. This is very powerful. So emotive.

[Anand Sehgal]

huge turmoil , as you would understand a lot better as a parent

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Interesting piece... I felt the sharp sense of emotional turmoil in this piece, and the longing for acceptance and love; to be cherished as the "golden child". I too felt as though I wanted more from this; as though it wanted to be a story or even a scene from a play more than it wanted to be a poem. I could see this playing on my television screen and crying for the child...deep emotional impact.

[Anand Sehgal]

I left it as an incomplete screenplay ( if you look at the category), and left to the readers to fill up the rest as per their wish. :)

[Girl Friday (Sarah W.)]

Oopps, sorry, I missed that. Well, then I was correct in my assessment that this seems like a piece that wants to be on the screen or the stage. Dialouge is the most difficult part of writing a good screenplay, at least in my opinion and in the projects that I have worked on. You have a knack for it...I look forward to seeing the lengthier version. :)

[Anand Sehgal]

Surely, I will try my level best :)

[Ruth]

Interesting...left me wanting more...a sadness to this too, very well written love x

[Anand Sehgal]

planning a short screenplay series based on events that I have seen first-hand

[Ruth]

Oh cool! That'll be good :)