Who is this Woman

This is a poem about a woman that I've dreamt about for many many years, although I never met her... but when I look back at all that I knew, she's the make up of all that I knew.

 

Who is this Woman?

 

She is my everything my heart and soul

A whisper in the dark as I grow old

She conceals my desire so private you see

No one should know those moments but me

 

She constitutes my views and takes my hand

A night on the town, listening to our favorite band

Scraping my hand has given some pain

Warm tender kisses like sparkling rain

 

Hopeful moments sheltered by love

Caressing my soul like an angel from above

Laughing aloud as we roll in the hay

Thanking my stars for this rare wonderful day

 

With all that said, I think it would be best

If I pause for a second and take a rest

My imagination has plenty of worth

For I can honestly say she’s not from this earth.

 

 

Reviews

[Annalisa]

Very sweet, nice work. Two quick suggestions though (and they're small so no big deal), first change "Thanking my stars for this most wonderful day"----to----"With all that said, I think it would be best"

But great work, and nice rhyming. I can't rhyme for my life >< I am envious!

[Michael X]

Nicely said Ralphy, a woman who is so captivating, she could only come from heaven, there is much to consider while reading this, for one the rhyme scheme is nicely laid out, and does flow with a sense of ease, as well as being enchanted by a love that

causes the heart to dream, "who is this woman"... great title , reflects an ode to beauty and love itself, the concept of this being a dreamlover takes the writing a desirous meaning, perhaps she is a combination of all the things that you want,

or seek, or perhaps she is your muse written in the stars, expressive longing,
also, I like the romantic aspect ypue emply, reminds of my first love and how
she passes through the mind every now and then. great job.
Take Care, Mike

Favorite stanza:

Hopeful moments sheltered by love
Caressing my soul like an angel from above
Laughing aloud as we roll in the hay
Thanking my stars for this rare wonderful day

[Wildfleour]

This is lovely, Ralphy. Perhaps she is your Muse.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very beautiful work of art. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[justjenn_2u]

This is beautiful. I believe that having a dream of whom I desire is what keeps me going. Without hope, where would be be? This is a smooth poem with a calming effect while reading. I enjoyed.

Good write, my friend!

[Kara Emily Krantz]

hahah awww this made me want to be in love again.... or for the first time... or whatever it may be :)

"No one should know those moments but me"

i loved that line the best. ::sigh::