Fallen into Hell

A dark and sad poem that could break your heart.

Somewhere dark,

Somewhere burning,

I'm calling to you,

But why won't you answer?

 

Can't you hear me?

Is it that you don't remember?

Is it that you can't save me?

Or have you grown to hate me

for leaving you?

 

Wounds of wrath,

Wounds of sorrow,

Wounds that scar you for life.

They never leave you,

They always haunt you,

They are the dark past.

 

Time has stopped,

frozen in a fiery rage,

Memories circling around inside,

never to forget

the paths I have taken

to get to this monsterious hell

 

What have I done?

Where should I go?

Who can I turn to?

Nothing that can be fixed,

No where in this darkness lite by flame,

No one can save me.

 

Not now,

Not ever,

I'll forever burn

in the darkness that blinds me

of my life before this.

 

This is what I deserve

This is what I've become

All I can do now?

Suffer.

Reviews

[Abel Garcia]

has a good feel to it as i read it, great poem

[Ruby Moon]

only one little nit pick... ><
"Is is that you don't remember?" did you mean "Is it..."?

not all too dark but i kind of like this tone too :

[Poet's World]

a power packed poem, very emotional , and i like the way you have framed the line formation, nice!, over all , a good job

[LostInThought ♥]

This is amazing! It flows so well and there was sooooo much emotion in it. I like how you add questions in there, that gives the poem voice and a personality... :) Good write

would you mind reviewing my work?

[Abel Garcia]

I agree with Siya lite should be lit this is a beautiful poem i actually feel like ive died and am a lost soul in hell, feels great :P good job

[Enigmatic Soul]

Whoa... One word, "intense". Pain surging through every verse every line, heart-breaking, yes. The experience in hell portrayed really well, the title definitely suits the writing. Yes! I did like it. Um, 3rd last verse, 2nd last line, I think "lite" should be "lit". =/
But overall, a great write! Keep up the good work!! :)