I"VE BEEN HERE, I'VE BEEN THERE

This is about an emotion that I have been through.

Two low set of bridges

Leading to where love ceases

Bite down the curved lake restraint

Circling anger unchain

I've been here

I've been there

'Twas two round village

Precious water crawling down

Dark grass soaked through

Only I know she's feeling blue

I've been here

I've been there

Now the village is in twinkle

Dancing villagers slowly mingle

Down is broadly curved lake

Only I know her gone ache

I've been here

I've been there

Reviews

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'IV'E BEEN HERE, IV'E BEEN THERE"
CAPOLAVARO,
It's a lonely empiness to struggle alone.
Village and tears and blues together;
seems easier somehow.Deep words:
Second stanza,
"Twas two round village
precious water crawling down
Dark grass soaked through
only I know she's feeling blue."
This was a very creative allagory
of your own emotions placed in
a natural setting.
Blessings,
Kathy

[Sinbulvinter]

Wow, you have a way with words. I really like the metaphors, the thought put into this, and how it really makes me think and feel while I read.
This is very good work here. I really like it

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much for appreciating this one. I do like your works as well. :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Clever use of metaphor in this one.

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much.:)

[boygene borice]

At first i couldnt get the meaning but after going through your explanation, i am really amazed at how you can write a poem with such kind of deep meaning. I love your art

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. I love your art too Boygene :)

[Manu]

Quite an interesting piece of work. I loved the way you have explained this whole write. A meaningful one. We all are connected through a medium ( you have used eyes as that medium)
Lovely thought and poem :-)

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much. :)

[mercy party]

what is cool about a story like this is that you can as a writer construct endless unintended meaning.
This worked i felt something more personal. Fantastic, effective and memorable story!

[Abraham George]

As her name means she is a Masterpiece and its hard for us to to understand those beautiful meaning she hide in those lines

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you very much. :)

[Jes' Pi]

A very good crafted poem..Beautiful!
100/100

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you for the time and review. :)

[Jes' Pi]

Oh, my fault haha. It doesn't matter if it is a poem or not, I loved it. :)

[Abraham George]

it is an Art

[Abraham George]

after reading those line and close your eyes and imagine you can feel that anger, sadness and happiness

[Tony Jordan]

It's a very good effort at employing metaphor and I really think that if you take all that has been said in the critiques that have went before this review then you will be even more successful.
Keep writing..

[CAPOLAVORO]

Thank you so much Tony. :) I'll keep that in mind.

[Coyote Poetry]

I loved how you used the words. The repetition made the meaning of the poem come alive.
"I've been here
I've been there"
I liked the above lines. Hold meaning for the most of us. Thank you dear poet for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[CAPOLAVORO]

I just do not know how to thank you sometimes for your kind words Cayote. Your such an angel in a human form. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome dear friend. I love your work.

[wordman]

it seems you are sad,you have lost your love,you have been here many times and you know the hurt

[CAPOLAVORO]

It could be. There is no right or wrong in this one actually. But if I were to say on my part, it is a process where all of us have been through. The first stanza is about hatred, the second is about sadness and the third is about happiness. It could be a break up or someone just hurt you and you move on.

two low set of bridges is like the two low set of eyebrows which depicts anger and aggression and the "curved lake" would be the lips or the mouth, notice that I used it twice already.

'Twas two round village means two round eyes and the dark grass are eyelashes the water part would be tears this stanza means sadness of the eyes.

The last stanza would mean happiness. The eyes is now happy The dancing villagers in here would be the swaying eyelashes.

All in all,it means I have experienced all of these emotions already and I understand how other people is feeling also. :) Notice that the picture is an eye. It all connects to the eyes of ours.

Thank you for the time. :)

[wordman]

well i was close ,great write

[CAPOLAVORO]

You bet! You are such a good reader. :)