I"VE BEEN HERE, I'VE BEEN THERE

I"VE BEEN HERE, I'VE BEEN THERE

A Story by CAPOLAVORO
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This is about an emotion that I have been through.

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Two low set of bridges
Leading to where love ceases
Bite down the curved lake restraint
Circling anger unchain

I've been here
I've been there


'Twas two round village
Precious water crawling down
Dark grass soaked through
Only I know she's feeling blue

I've been here
I've been there

Now the village is in twinkle
Dancing villagers slowly mingle
Down is broadly curved lake
Only I know her gone ache

I've been here
I've been there









© 2017 CAPOLAVORO



Author's Note

CAPOLAVORO
I hope you get the meaning of it somehow. It's just sometimes I could be of no good putting a bridge for my poems to the readers. :) I put a clue on every last statement though.

two low set of bridges is like the two low set of eyebrows which depicts anger and aggression and the "curved lake" would be the lips or the mouth, notice that I used it twice already.

'Twas two round village means two round eyes and the dark grass are eyelashes the water part would be tears this stanza means sadness of the eyes.

The last stanza would mean happiness. The eyes is now happy The dancing villagers in here would be the swaying eyelashes.

All in all,it means I have experienced all of these emotions already and I understand how other people is feeling also. :) Notice that the picture is an eye. It all connects to the eyes of ours.

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Wow, you have a way with words. I really like the metaphors, the thought put into this, and how it really makes me think and feel while I read.
This is very good work here. I really like it

Posted 7 Months Ago


CAPOLAVORO

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much for appreciating this one. I do like your works as well. :)
Clever use of metaphor in this one.

Posted 8 Months Ago


CAPOLAVORO

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much.:)
At first i couldnt get the meaning but after going through your explanation, i am really amazed at how you can write a poem with such kind of deep meaning. I love your art

Posted 8 Months Ago


CAPOLAVORO

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much. I love your art too Boygene :)
Quite an interesting piece of work. I loved the way you have explained this whole write. A meaningful one. We all are connected through a medium ( you have used eyes as that medium)
Lovely thought and poem :-)

Posted 8 Months Ago


CAPOLAVORO

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much. :)
what is cool about a story like this is that you can as a writer construct endless unintended meaning.
This worked i felt something more personal. Fantastic, effective and memorable story!

Posted 8 Months Ago


Abraham George

8 Months Ago

As her name means she is a Masterpiece and its hard for us to to understand those beautiful meaning .. read more
CAPOLAVORO

8 Months Ago

Thank you very much. :)
A very good crafted poem..Beautiful!
100/100

Posted 8 Months Ago


Jes' Pi

8 Months Ago

Oh, my fault haha. It doesn't matter if it is a poem or not, I loved it. :)
Abraham George

8 Months Ago

it is an Art
Abraham George

8 Months Ago

after reading those line and close your eyes and imagine you can feel that anger, sadness and happin.. read more
It's a very good effort at employing metaphor and I really think that if you take all that has been said in the critiques that have went before this review then you will be even more successful.
Keep writing..

Posted 8 Months Ago


CAPOLAVORO

8 Months Ago

Thank you so much Tony. :) I'll keep that in mind.
I loved how you used the words. The repetition made the meaning of the poem come alive.
"I've been here
I've been there"
I liked the above lines. Hold meaning for the most of us. Thank you dear poet for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 8 Months Ago


CAPOLAVORO

8 Months Ago

I just do not know how to thank you sometimes for your kind words Cayote. Your such an angel in a hu.. read more
Coyote Poetry

8 Months Ago

You are welcome dear friend. I love your work.
it seems you are sad,you have lost your love,you have been here many times and you know the hurt

Posted 8 Months Ago


CAPOLAVORO

8 Months Ago

It could be. There is no right or wrong in this one actually. But if I were to say on my part, it is.. read more
 wordman

8 Months Ago

well i was close ,great write
CAPOLAVORO

8 Months Ago

You bet! You are such a good reader. :)
I also couldn't make out what this poem wanted to convey until I read the comments. A little criticism here, while you are writing a poem only you know all the metaphors and the meaning so you can understand it well in order to make your readers to understand you have to give a hint to the readers or atleast mention the comparision of the words. Apart from this I liked the imagery of the village and the surroundings.

Posted 8 Months Ago


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Najam Us Saher

8 Months Ago

There is no need of sorry and thanks I can understand that you were in a hurry. I am also like that .. read more
CAPOLAVORO

8 Months Ago

Hehe. Thank you.

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