The Fall

a love poem

Be careful dear and watch your feet

least you fall the path is steep.

One foot sat and then the other,

will keep you safe from one another.

But through the years

and all those words

did not prepare me

where love is concerned.

Fell so fast,

yes

dove right in,

tumbled down toward the win.

Swirling thoughts,

dreamy start

  a racing pulse

warms the heart.

With one glance

I fell so fast

and decades later

 I find

that fall

to be steadfast.

Reviews

[Neville]

Yes and what a love poem, it seems to have everything, including longevity. Nice one Cherrie....Neville

[Cherrie Palmer]

I wanted to give a twist to falling

[Neville]

What like you did last summer, well twist again, coz twisting time is here.... But don't fall, just lower yourself gracefully.....

[Cherrie Palmer]

Also true that's what gave me the idea
The whole I've fallen and can't get up

[Tate Morgan]

Love is the great leveler of humanity it has no rhyme or reason

[Cherrie Palmer]

Amen to that

[Tate Morgan]

But we all love you

[Cherrie Palmer]

That's cause I just made cookies

[Tate Morgan]

hahaha yeah I like cookies

[Einstein Noodle]

yes...love seems to be the master ...takes control of our volition eh!? glad this fall became steadfast ...not always the case ;)
"But through the years and all these words
did not prepare me" i think the syntax is off a bit ... maybe something like "... all these words still i'm not prepared" but could just be me eh!? these kinds of poems always remind me of my worst leap off that cliff ..hit the retro-rockets and with great exuberance hasten my horrible crash at the bottom ;)) hence a good reason for me to appreciate your closing :))))))))))))))))
E.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Must be the rush of not knowing that keeps folks on the cliffs edge.

[WILDERNESS]

beautifully penned. with love its always like this , no experience counts.............

[Cherrie Palmer]

thank you, so much. At first i was going to use the phrase: I've Fallen And Can't Get Up. But once ywisted around I decided against it

[CD Campbell]

I enjoy a good love poem and this certainly that. The first two lines, being the longest, set the pace for what I see visually and emotionally a sweet downward ride to a appropriate conclusion. Great use of language. It was romantic without being annoyingly cute. I think it's a great poem, but the only thing I would possibly change is the last word in line 5, "win". I don't know why it doesn't sit when I read it aloud. Anyway, it might be how I'm saying it. Cheers. CD

[magenta24uk]

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[Dianne S Penfold]

Playful, the way the lines rhyme. It reminded me of some of my own work. Well done.

[Cherrie Palmer]

thank you Sarah