The Fall

The Fall

A Poem by Cherrie Palmer
"

a love poem

"

Be careful dear and watch your feet

least you fall the path is steep.


One foot sat and then the other,

will keep you safe from one another.


But through the years

and all those words


did not prepare me

where love is concerned.


Fell so fast,

yes

dove right in,

tumbled down toward the win.


Swirling thoughts,

dreamy start


  a racing pulse

warms the heart.


With one glance

I fell so fast

and decades later


 I find

that fall

to be steadfast.


© 2018 Cherrie Palmer



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Yes and what a love poem, it seems to have everything, including longevity. Nice one Cherrie....Neville

Posted 7 Months Ago


Cherrie Palmer

7 Months Ago

I wanted to give a twist to falling
Neville Pettitt

7 Months Ago

What like you did last summer, well twist again, coz twisting time is here.... But don't fall, just .. read more
Cherrie Palmer

7 Months Ago

Also true that's what gave me the idea
The whole I've fallen and can't get up
Love is the great leveler of humanity it has no rhyme or reason

Posted 7 Months Ago


Tate Morgan

7 Months Ago

But we all love you
Cherrie Palmer

7 Months Ago

That's cause I just made cookies
Tate Morgan

7 Months Ago

hahaha yeah I like cookies
yes...love seems to be the master ...takes control of our volition eh!? glad this fall became steadfast ...not always the case ;)
"But through the years and all these words
did not prepare me" i think the syntax is off a bit ... maybe something like "... all these words still i'm not prepared" but could just be me eh!? these kinds of poems always remind me of my worst leap off that cliff ..hit the retro-rockets and with great exuberance hasten my horrible crash at the bottom ;)) hence a good reason for me to appreciate your closing :))))))))))))))))
E.

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Posted 8 Months Ago


Cherrie Palmer

8 Months Ago

Must be the rush of not knowing that keeps folks on the cliffs edge.
beautifully penned. with love its always like this , no experience counts.............

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Posted 8 Months Ago


Cherrie Palmer

8 Months Ago

thank you, so much. At first i was going to use the phrase: I've Fallen And Can't Get Up. But once y.. read more
I enjoy a good love poem and this certainly that. The first two lines, being the longest, set the pace for what I see visually and emotionally a sweet downward ride to a appropriate conclusion. Great use of language. It was romantic without being annoyingly cute. I think it's a great poem, but the only thing I would possibly change is the last word in line 5, "win". I don't know why it doesn't sit when I read it aloud. Anyway, it might be how I'm saying it. Cheers. CD

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Posted 8 Months Ago


Amazing work. Love it. Great stuff, emotional and really digs deep. Thanks for sharing your work. If you fancy a challenge come and try my blog, I think you will like it. https://chrissyswritingchallenge.wordpress.com/

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Posted 8 Months Ago


Playful, the way the lines rhyme. It reminded me of some of my own work. Well done.

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Posted 8 Months Ago


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Cherrie Palmer

8 Months Ago

thank you Sarah

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Cherrie Palmer
Cherrie Palmer

Bull Shoals Lake, AR



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I am a published poet and love poetry. My husband and I live near the White River, and love trout fishing. I find my surroundings a great inspiration to me. I also have two books on Amazon Kindle: O.. more..

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