The Struggle.

this came out of NOWHERE! it just hiut me and i went crazy trying to write it down :)

i'm screaming

In an attempt to break free.

 

i'm sceaming

as i try to flee.

 

i'm fighting the urge

to let you take hold.

 

i'm fighting the urge

to just let go.

 

i know what you've done

you've got her now.

 

i know what you've done

you're holding her down.

 

she's in your grasp

out of guilt.

 

she's screaming inside

she just won't let you know.

 

she's screaming inside

as you gain control.

 

she want to stop

she wants to say no.

 

she wants to stop

so please let her go.

Author's Note

this is about me in the first couple prts but i made it about my best friend :) hahaha sorry. im like outta breath it came so fast!! ahhh i'm excited :)

Reviews

[Alana Michele]

I love it, but you do not have to rhyme all the time :]

[Chamil3001]

im experiencing something similar nowadays.

[Camille Corbett]

HAHAHAHAHA
um, What is this? This is creepy, not capitalize and choppy.

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I liked the poem. I thought it was good and I agree with Cassiopia Summers. She is right I like the flow and thyme too. Thanks for sharing. :)

[Cassiopia Summers]

The flow is well written, and the rhyme works well. It doesn't all rhyme, but I like it that way.

[Coyote Poetry]

The desire for freedom is very strong in your words. I like the flow and the ending. A very good poem. The point was made.
Coyote

[Chelsea.]

interesting format. :)

[Jane Doe]

i likkie

[TeenRomance2]

:-(

[Bexfinch]

Nice job its a strong piece keep writing although there are typos everyone has them write some MORE!!!!!!