Roses Shed Tears

Roses Shed Tears

A Poem by William Liston
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Kyrielle; somewhat random, abstract scribbles

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A crowd floats forward evermore
their glances push a lifeless shore
Emotions reach their palms too near
I swear a rose can shed a tear

Cascading rain falls to the ground
to sink my ears in endless sound
A dark abyss emerges clear
I swear a rose can shed a tear

My fingers ache for dampened air
through which a sullen soul could stare
Though every smile can beam with cheer
I swear a rose can shed a tear

Another day springs forth anew 
A gleaming ray is seen by few
A silent cry somewhere I hear
I swear a rose can shed a tear



© 2017 William Liston



Author's Note

William Liston
This probably makes absolutely no sense outside of my own mind, but I still want to know your honest thoughts and interpretations on this piece. Constructive criticism is welcome and encouraged.

The first draft of this piece can be found in my blog.

I've discovered that the abstractness of this poem allows it to be read backwards. Try reading the last line first then reading it upwards as follows: I swear a rose can shed a tear / a silent cry somewhere I hear / A gleaming ray is seen by few ... etc.

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William, the best poems seem to write themselves and, at 2:00 a.m. what you wrote was very good indeed. A brilliant line 'I swear a rose can shed a tear' has become the focus for a good poem. One thing, and it is minor is in the first verse where move & moves appear a little close to me. Keep it up William. A good write.

This review was written for a previous version of this writing

Posted 11 Months Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

11 Months Ago

I appreciate your kind words, Ted. They mean a lot to me. I also appreciate your critique ... I'll c.. read more



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I like it. It appeals to my dark side, which i cant seem to escape

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

2 Months Ago

I'm glad this poem could do that.
Thank you for your kind words.
I maybe unable to help You if You've missed anything in the form, but I can sense if a poem is structured enough, and like always Yours is greatly structured, and I know You will become a really fine poet (not that You aren't already!), not only because You have an opened willing mind, but also because You have that high fine sense.

To open Your heart and feel the tears of that sad grieving heart, (I think of the rose here as a woman's heart), to hear through silence what others may not here, need that high sense I told You about, sometimes You hear through silence voices You don't know even to whom they belong, You just feel them.

Heartfelt, sincere, and ovely done, flowing so smoothly... Thank You for sharing Your talent with us.


Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

2 Months Ago

Ahhh, thank you for your kind words, Light. As always, you complements are warm and endearing.
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Hmmm well let me dive into this little gem. There is a dark/lonely feel to this piece..perhaps of a inner struggle or depression. " crowd floats"...maybe people passing by or not "seeing" a person. I'm taking "a rose" as something/ someone tender or sensitive...and yet inner struggles?? and yet smiles to the world...but dying on the inside... yet, there is always hope in a day "anew"...but loving how you flip it back to....A silent cry somewhere i hear.....ahhhh

Posted 2 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

2 Months Ago

Thank you for your in-depth review, Susan : )
I love to read others' interpretations of this .. read more
susancapozzi

2 Months Ago

I really enjoyed this piece and you're welcome. :-)
Wow!......I need say no more! Wow!

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

4 Months Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed. Thank you.
I found this piece very deep and thought provoking. The words flowed very well and the rhyming was spot-on.
Thanks for sharing it with us young William.

I don't know when u joined WC but after reading your profile page its hard to believe that a 16 year old could write so beautifully and with such deep knowing words - one would expect from someone experienced and much, much older. Please keep writing young man. Angelheart 🌹

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

6 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words! I truly appreciate them : )
I've been on this site for.. read more
Angelheart1

6 Months Ago

You are welcome William. Your writing has a familiar feel to it - I will definitely be reading more.. read more
I see you Love roses as much as I. They do cry.
🌹

Posted 6 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

6 Months Ago

I agree. Thank you for reviewing.
William - I'm at a loss for words...this is so beautiful.

Julie

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

7 Months Ago

Thank you. Glad I could leave you speechless :)
Brilliant piece. You are really an amazing writer. Contemplating on different facets of existence sometimes opens up a new window to our thought process. We can always find something meaningful even out of nothing. Mere by watching something can make us realise it's beauty and need of life and it's surroundings. Different things take place without getting noticed or sometimes they do get heard but the fact that they happen doesn't change. This poem carried varied emotions throughout. Roses shed tears is a very beautiful line, it blooms and we only see it's beauty but there are very few who can see that inversed side of it.
Well done, William.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

7 Months Ago

Ah, another lovely review. I'm so glad you saw the message in the repeated line. I agree, there are .. read more
A beautiful craft indeed! The rhyming and the flow are beautiful. I agree, certain things just come out and they are always out of world.
I loved the whole poem. It is a pleasure reading this poem.
Thank you William Liston, sharing for sharing..
P.S. I see a great poet in you. Keep writing and sharing.

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

7 Months Ago

Thank you so much for your kind words. They are greatly appreciated.
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This was gorgeous. Very elegantly written.

Posted 9 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

William Liston

9 Months Ago

I'm glad you enjoyed. Thank you for reading and reviewing.

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