August

August

A Poem by Lauren
"

Written about him.

"
Remember when we first met?
      Back in August,            when the air
    was still hot and your hair was still long?

     Remember that first time we kissed?
You laughed and asked if I was okay
I smiled back, nervous, "Yeah, I'm good."

We climbed onto the roof and
    I      held       your       hand
Then the cops came,        and we ran.

You got so jealous just two weeks in
      Do you remember that night I was with my friends?
  And I cried, cried, cried on the phone    to      you.

      Then there was our first "I      love      you"
   It was rushed and I didn't mean it,     yet
But now I can honestly say       I        do.

  Do you remember the time that we slow danced
       In the parking lot      of the mall      behind my house?
   My nose was red and my fingers numb, but    I    didn't    know.

And     just    three      nights      ago,
When my arms    bled    red
You yelled and you cried; said you didn't want me d e a d

   You're everything, do    you    know    that?
I can't lose you, I would die, but I won't
  And if you ever think of leaving, p l e a s e, don't.

© 2012 Lauren



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Lauren
Always open to your thoughts/questions/etc.

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A great little poem about love. I really liked this one.

Posted 3 Years Ago


I am not sure about the spacing out of certain words... I tried to read them as a hidden subtext, but I did not see a pattern there.
The poetry was on the spot for me however. Very strong write.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Thank you for entering my little contest.
I hope you understand that I cannot comment now as this would not be fair to other entries.
I shall return after the contest ends.
Best regards.
Clive.

Posted 3 Years Ago


I especially appreciate the function the formatting performs here....very well done. i'm always surprised when people are nervous to stray outside of the lines with poetry...glad to see you chose the route you did.

CM.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Wow so bitter sweet makes me think of High school and high school crushes
and carefree Innocents again falling in love and falling out of love
all the good young high school memories.


Such raw Emotions this makes me think of the song
Strawberry Wine by Deana Carter that song brought me
back to my Teen crush at 16teen to 18teen.

and this Poem sounds just like the first taste of
love thank you for Inspiring me I may write about my crush.

I never trusted Boys LOL. I didn't want my heart broken
and I believed in keep my Temple Pure until Marriage and
I did but many do until that time pressure to give away my
virginity never happened I had a problem with the Wrong guys
coming around more like perverts only ones that were good
was the nice guys :) but thank you for that Beautiful view into
the past.





Remember when we first met?
Back in August, when the air

was still hot and your hair was still long?




Remember that first time we kissed?

You laughed and asked if I was okay

I smiled back, nervous, "Yeah, I'm good."




We climbed onto the roof and

I held your hand

Then the cops came, and we ran.



Beautiful thank you for sharing this Wonderful piece.

Blessings. kindred poet

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Benita c Staebelll - KindredPoet

3 Years Ago

well that's the fun part of reading others work it is always inspiring
and I am thankful to .. read more
The bittersweet memories in this peice. The emotions raw and true. Great peice!!!!!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lauren

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much!!
great beaitiful mantra about love. i love how story progrres i was not bored .and also very hopefull poem make my day thanks lot

Posted 3 Years Ago


Lauren

3 Years Ago

thank you so much!
The story in the poem felt personal. I like the memories and the thoughts. I could the need and the want in the poem. A strong ending to the excellent poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


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Those last two lines say it all... you won't die, yet please don't ever leave...but still... your picture says it best. Deep emotional piece... well done.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Lauren

3 Years Ago

I wrote this a long time ago. It's nice to read it again. :)
Thank you so much
.

3 Years Ago

yeah it is fun to pull out those old poems and revisit old emotions....oh and you are welcome. :)

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