Trapped

Over the years ive build walls around myself

So i won't get hurt by people

But it blocked out too much

So I was trapped

 

Ive waited and waited

With someone with the power

To get these damn walls down

But no ojne ever does

 

Then you came along

I knew that you had the power

And i would be free

It got me exicted

 

You started to work your magic

Taking down the wall brick by brick

I could see the sun again

Then your magic turned bad

 

You were just faking it

You were here to make it worse

To make me trapped forever

And it worked

 

You added more bricks

And closed me into my tomb

Of sadness

Stuck forever

No way out

Author's Note

Ignore grammar and spelling problems. What do you think??

Reviews

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

I was feeling the love...so optimistic and full of hope.....
Then I got hit by a train I never saw coming.
The loss of every joy I had was so sudden.
Every emotion you put into this poem leaps from the page.
The candid nature of your words bleed sincerity.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Awww, this is so sad! I can feel the fiery pain out of this piece! It's also very relatable. Love it. You capture your own feelings here. It's a really good poem!
Great write!

[Victoria PoetryBunny]

I love this a lot! You hit this with that trapped emotional feeling so well. I love how you used that brick wall and at the end, in the last stanza... just brilliant. I love this write a lot. I feel like this a lot, just recently have felt like this. This hits that feeling; and the problem well. A very real write, about a situation that seems invisible with the brick wall, but is real and true... fantastic write. :D

[Earthy Mumma Soul]

sad.... hard to know who to trust ..
I feel the same .. inside ...
and have made the same mistakes.. still..
lots of emotion here , great ! :) keep writing xx

[Death Girl]

I love this poem. one of the few poem that I keep reading.

[skigirl]

I feel like this a lot. I can tell that you put a lot of thought into it. Loved it! Can't read to read more from you!!!

[Death Girl]

I could feel the emotion from your writing. So fuul of hope and then the loss of joy.

[TawnyBlueStar]

very good :)
i like the fifth and sixth stanza the best :D

[trippy kitty]

This was great. Keep writing :)