Adrift

Adrift

A Poem by Emily B
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On days when

I'm neither here nor there

Adrift in a sea of senseless noise

Battered by waves of unrecognizable emotion,

Floating, just floating.

On days when I have

That faraway look

When you call my name,

Just know, you may have to call again

before I come back to you.


© 2009 Emily B



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There's something immensely real in being neither here nor there.. tis a place where a person can be utterly alone but happily self, briefly lost in an unreachable place Cloud-gazing loses me to reality sometimes..

Those two last lines are like golden cords holding you close to someone.. out of reach but never gone.. so beautiful.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Emily B

3 Years Ago

thank you, dearest
emmajoy

3 Years Ago

more than a pleasure, Emily... and now i switch off my lappie and ligh, then, creep into that place .. read more



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Adrift in a sea of senseless noise

Battered by waves of unrecognizable emotion,

Floating, just floating.

A poignant poem which hit the spot with me. 100 :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Once more a very sincere work that says so much and yet says it in few words. A true gift. It gives the feel of tranquillity and simuntaneous lostness.

Posted 5 Years Ago


a very moving and personal message, I felt quite teary, reading this.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I love this, the characterisation is superb and resonant, I can relate to this, the "waves of unrecognizable emotion" in particular. I like the use of floating because it's continuous rather than static so you know that this is an a state the persona could return to in the future. I love the "sea of senseless noise", the classic imagery is superb and the idea of noise as senseless too. I love the structure, the short, succinct lines contrasted with the longer ones, the irregularity really gives the reader the feel of floating on waves because the shape of your poem reflects the shape of the ocean.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I kind of floated through your poem; it was an easy read with that trademark unease one feels after reading your work, kind of like I should somehow straighten up my life right now sort of thing. I don't think unrecognizable fits. It seems too concrete here. My humble opinion. Thanks for sharing your talent!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I loved the lines :

Adrift in a sea of senseless noise

Battered by waves of unrecognizable emotion..

It is amazing when I come across a poem which expresses the emotions which I have been going through in exact words.It helps to know that how unaware are we when we wallow in what we feel thinking we are alone in feeling so.These words were a reckoning that am not alone in my sentiments.We are all tied by that common something..
Emily..you write with a genuine candor as if you are whispering to a friend or writing in a diary..it is touching.Thankyou..

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

And if that doesn't work...go away and leave me alone...lol...I got too much to think about. :o)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

And even so, a certain part remains there, adrift...There should be a word in English which combines splendid and simple...How about simplended!!

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Dreaming images of worlds to be
just letting go of now
takes wind across the sea
sailing alone somehow
wake me...

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I can relate on days I'm lost in thought, so many thoughts that I lose myself in them. Creatively written, nice flow and very expressive usage of words. Thanks for sharing! (:

Posted 7 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Emily B
Emily B

Richmond, KY



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