Moods

Moods

A Poem by DrD

sit there, arms folded about your knees

sit there and sulk

and still you are beautiful even when your mood

settles on your face like bad makeup

your glances dance with the fire of your anger

and your tongue spews threats and accusations

but your beauty shields me from all harm

and i find wonder even in your wrath

 

cry. . . . blackmail me with tears knowing my heart

is your ransom already paid

advertise your disappointment with a trembling lip

and sniff your sadness with jerky breaths

you will soon want refuge in my arms

and rest your head on my shoulder asking for promises

then there will be crumpled sheets and anguished gasps

as you lock me within your legs and lift your eyes to god

 

pout . . . .  no offense is greater than one against you

you know you seduce with a look over your shoulder

you use your beauty as a weapon and you invade at will

if i refuse, countless hearts are waiting for you to happen in

come, let us pretend again that all is well

and you can move upon me with clenched teeth

and whimper before you collapse upon my chest and lie about love

and i can believe it again and cherish a hope about someday


© 2012 DrD



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Tex
I loved this.

Having dyslexia and having given up on learning in school I can not speak to construct, but I can speak to honesty, truth, the emotion the piece brings to the fore for me. It is all there.

The layers of dysfunction in this are fascinating. In my mind I see a man older than his lover, somewhat chauvinistic, dealing with his lover in a somewhat condescending way. But before we get a chance to feel sorry for her we learn that she is manipulative and uses her charms to get what she needs from the relationship. The two dance their dysfunctional dance in perfect step, it is a dance they have created and they know the steps well. All the same the lingering doubt remains, the truth can not be avoided. They are pretending. He is hoping, we get a sense of longing for honesty and something more authentic. We are left to wonder, is she playing him or does she feel the same? And, would he change the steps to this dance if given the opportunity?

Wonderful. Just pulls you right in.

If this is who you are... then how painful it must have been for you to review my poem. Thank you for being so nice about it.


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DrD

5 Years Ago

Nicholas, I have become calloused to difficult things because yes, this is who I am. I am also very .. read more



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That was so well done..I liked it :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


DrD

3 Years Ago

Thank you. I appreciate you stopping by.
Great write, really liked the extent of footing on reality, two unique characters who knows to thrive irrespective of honesty of true love, am really proud of both, manipaulator and the one manipulated both can fit in shakesperean stage, many can relate to this

Posted 3 Years Ago


DrD

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your visit. I'm glad you liked this one. I will be visiting your work more often bec.. read more
Linda alexander

3 Years Ago

Take care............
Do you know, this poem says more about you than her! I got a lovely visual picture of you observing her!
Really liked this poem, Thanks.

Posted 3 Years Ago


DrD

3 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I do appreciate you reading this.
absolutely brilliant. perfect in all respects.
great poem.

Posted 3 Years Ago


DrD

3 Years Ago

You are far too kind. I appreciate your visit and hope you will return soon.
Woody

3 Years Ago

you're welcome and certainly will.
You have described her with such beautiful details. Looks like you have studied every inch of her. You have painted a beautiful image of her. Thank you for sharing this. :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


DrD

3 Years Ago

And thank you for your visit. I truly appreciate your comments.
This is the most captivating poem I have ever read about a man in love with a beguiling, beautiful woman. How helpless he feels and how in love with her enticing, mesmeric, fascinating charms . There is guile in her, but that is adorable too. An incomparable read.

Posted 3 Years Ago


DrD

3 Years Ago

Your words border on flattery and are deeply appreciated. Thank you for visiting here.
come, let us pretend again that all is well
and you can move upon me with clenched teeth
and whimper before you collapse upon my chest and lie about love
and i can believe it again and cherish a hope about someday

Oh dear, doctor, wonderful write but we are not all so heartless, I swear;)

Posted 3 Years Ago


DrD

3 Years Ago

Are you sure, Pryde? I'm taking appointments for those who want to prove it. Joking, of course. T.. read more
Pryde Foltz

3 Years Ago

Hahahahahahahahaha
wow, wow, wow. Amazing work.

Posted 3 Years Ago


DrD

3 Years Ago

Thank you, Sarrah. I hope you will visit again soon.
David, I love this poem. It is crystal clear and brilliantly composed. Is this a wife perhaps or a spoiled girlfriend...either way it is perfection. Well done!

Posted 3 Years Ago


DrD

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your visit. I'm glad you liked Moods. I think a lot of people like this work because.. read more
Bright Ocean Star

3 Years Ago

You are correct. Most everyone can identify with it in some way or another.
This is excellent work! I'm so flattered now by your words. Loved the line...
"then there will be crumpled sheets and anguished gasps
as you lock me within your legs and lift your eyes to god"
This is mesmerizing in its intimacy and truth. I love how this doesn't shy away from reality but looks it full in the face and with such skill. Really glad to be introduced to you and your writing!




Posted 3 Years Ago


DrD

3 Years Ago

The pleasure's mine, believe me. I'm happy you liked this one. It's always been kinda special to m.. read more

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