Spiteful God

Why would you take the lives of three,

Just to create something faulty beyond repair?

Am I just sick entertainment in your circus?

Nothing more than a freak in a cage for your enjoyment,

I cannot hear you laughing but I know you smirk,

Beat me and tear open my skin,

I'm nothing more than rusty cogs.

I cannot escape it,

The guilt you make me feel for doubting you,

Your force tears from my eyes feeling the need to atone,

Why take the chance on me if I'm merely scrap,

Passed from another to another,

Just somebody else's problem,

When will I finally anger you to the point...

That I'll just be recycled. 

How is it I can feel hate to the person who created me,

Feel remorse for the man who gave me life,

I am the man locked away from existence,

While you would be the master who laughs at my pain,

Should I feel guilty or stronger than before,

For the God who looks over me is spiteful. 

Reviews

[Crystal Marie Dreier]

This is truly beautiful, sometimes I may ask myself "Why God" to only hear silence in return. I may not like how my life goes, and he may not give us this chance to hear him but in my mind everything happens for a reason, good or bad. We must just live our lives how we feel we are supposed to.

[Muse]

Why would take the lives of three,

did you mean..."why would you take"

Passed from another to another,
Just somebody else's problem,
When will I finally anger you to the point...
That I'll just be recycled.

That part of the poem made me think of karma...failing to find your self-worth in one life time...so we are forced to relive another.

clever penning.

[Forgotten]

Ah thank you for finding that mistake! And thank you for your review :) The phrase why would you take the lives of three stems back to the fact I had two sisters and a brother who died not long after they were born, and if they hadn't I never would have been created

[Muse]

my brother is the same deal...he was born after a mis-carriage. There's always a purpose...even in death I suppose.

[Forgotten]

Yeah I guess, I feel that since I've been given the chance that I should be making his choice worth the people he took so early, I miss them hugely even though they never had names and I never met them

[Muse]

oh..some day you will...some day. :)

[Forgotten]

I hope so :) I like to think that when I go they'll be waiting to finally meet me, I think I like to hold on to that hope

[Muse]

:)

[Muse]

Why would take the lives of three,

did you mean..."why would you take"

Passed from another to another,

Just somebody else's problem,
When will I finally anger you to the point...
That I'll just be recycled.

That part of the poem made me think of karma...failing to find one's self in one life time...so forced to relive another.

clever penning.

[Androglossia]

Hmm.. The master of puppets? Angst is apparent on the lines. We can be angry at some point. This is a picture of a frustrated crow shouting curses to the sky that never answers. Spitting blames to the earth that never cares. After all, we are just part of a huge experiment not known to man. Great write!

[Forgotten]

Thank you for your wonderful review, I love you how explained it better than I did ;)

[Androglossia]

It's the imagery you created:)

[Forgotten]

Well I'm glad you grasped it so vividly :)

[A. H. Pinley]

Sounds like Job. We're human. We doubt all the time. It's normal to doubt the God that breathed life into man. I sometimes doubt, but when I find myself in that place of self isolation I ask God to allow me to quit beating myself up for not getting it perfect. He's not looking for perfection, but obedience.

[Brandon S. Whitten]

Catholicism would explain it. God isn't actually spiteful. Well penned.

[Forgotten]

No I'm a Christian, but I like to look from the perspective of someone who hates a God, thank you for your review

[Brandon S. Whitten]

it is your art and not in your heart, I see. yw

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Powerful rant. Are you Catholic by any quirk of fate? A well written and thought provoking piece. Flows beautifully and is full of pathos.

[Forgotten]

Aha no I'm Christian without the beliefs, yet I'm partial to the belief of a deity and fascinated by the idea of it. Thank you for your review

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am a Catholic without beliefs but we bare the weight of original sin and do guilt very well lol!

[Forgotten]

Oh wow, I don't ever hear of many Catholics. One of my exs was a Pagan, she was one of the peculiar ones, a great person though nonetheless

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Hey J-P check these out. I think they speak of my religious beliefs!
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Passion8/1008949/
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Passion8/1008954/

[ROSALIND]

can you please review my work thank you

[ROSALIND]

can you please give me a review on my latest pieces of work thank you ...:)

[Rob Santana]

Whoa!!! Strong and brutal!!! Great job..

[Forgotten]

Haha thank you, I'm glad the emotions came through! :)