Gypsy Woman

Gypsy Woman

A Poem by Fran Marie


My tarot  cards hold destiny. lines in hands tell

   your story.. Ripe as mango  fruit sweet juice of

life flows from within your veins

 you stand on the ridge of golden years

 as an army of angels play

the angelical music of the harp.


perhaps the cards show no kindness

yet it is necessary to be truthful than to

say there is much hope in future relations

of any kind.. no residual love awaits ,,,

I see these things for I am that Gypsy Woman



          



© 2016 Fran Marie



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really interesting piece of work here. I love your use of words and the overall lingo of the piece as it really accentuates the topic. I also really appreciate the way you conveyed the difficulties of the gypsy woman where sometimes her reading may bring unpleasant results but its better to stick to the truth rather that to comfort the hearts of the one being read as its always hard to deliver bad news. Very well done. And keep up the good work.

Posted 11 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

4 Months Ago

Thanks.. so very much appreciated



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I think this piece is interesting and has a lot of potential, but it doesn't feel "finished" to me. I think the first thing you need to do is decide why you break your lines where you do. The words that begin and end lines receive extra emphasis, and don't underestimate the power of putting a word or phrase on a line by itself.

Posted 3 Months Ago


At first a sweet, then an uncomfortable poem. Cautionary, or maybe just blunt about "the cards" and life. I think you mean something by the diminishing fot and underlines, but I am too thick to figure it out. She leaves me with a bad taste, and yet I find myself wanting to defy her and prove her wrong!!

Posted 3 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

3 Months Ago

Thanks.. the underlining is simply one of the rules for contest entry..of ten words given..
With each line you give glimpses into a deeper world, a world of sacred secrets. The words and soul of her entice one to come into the light of her revelation. When I was young I met such a gypsy girl with her tarot cards. Was pulled away just as she was revealing my path. You made me wonder what if.

Posted 4 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

4 Months Ago

Thanks so vey much..for reading i so appreciate ..
This is intriguing and well crafty. Who hold our fate? The card? Love the feel and the description in this piece

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

4 Months Ago

Thanks poetic beauty..for reading.. in this poem the tarot cards hold the fate.. but in reality who .. read more
Poetic Beauty

4 Months Ago

I agree with you on this thought.
WoodenChair

4 Months Ago

I believe our existence is for the simple purpose of the conservation of energy.

Thi.. read more
interesting to read ...editing is all over the place ...me thinks on purpose ..really think the trailing off of thought and font in closing is effective and creative ... very different ... but it is after all .. the Gypsy Woman! ;))
E.

Posted 4 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

4 Months Ago

Thanks Eistein so. Very much.. yes the font variation was for effect and also this was a using ten .. read more
Einstein Noodle

4 Months Ago

ahhhhhhhhhhh! :)
This piece reminds me of my aunt. She is what I always picture when I think of a "gypsy women." She burns sage to keep ghosts away and back in the day, she wore flowly pants and tie dyed shirts and played her guitar for dimes and nickels in the park, she smoked weed and didn't settle down in one place or marry or have kids. She was truly a free spirit. Thank you for sharing this.

Posted 5 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

4 Months Ago

Thanks so very much.. your aunt sounds like she had fun beinng a free spirit.. glad you enjoyed..
Described so well... The first stanza is so poetic, the second connects well... I like it over-all...

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

4 Months Ago

Thanks so vey much;
Love this the imagery is great

Posted 5 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

5 Months Ago

Thanks so vey much 😀
It's funny...I have just written a piece about a gypsy woman only now...and I found this on my feed...really vibrant and colorful imagery, ma'am...I found the phrase "ridge of golden years" very striking....if you hadn't underlined those words, I would never have imagined that it was for a contest, given the fluidity of the piece.......cheers!

Posted 7 Months Ago


  Fran Marie

7 Months Ago

thanks, Moons fairest, so very much for reviewing.. yes it was a contest for ten given words..glad y.. read more
your story.. Ripe as mango fruit sweet juice of
life flows from within your veins
you stand on the ridge of golden years
WHAT ALLURING WORDS, WOW :)
LOVED EVERY BIT OF THIS PIECE OF ART

Posted 7 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

  Fran Marie

7 Months Ago

thanks so very much, Apoora, for reviewing my poetry..glad you enjoyed

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