Fear

Fear

A Poem by GDmonster

Long narrow hall

 

Lights a flicker

 

Not alone

 

Stalking eyes

 

Began to panic

 

Shadows grab

 

Floor stained red

 

Now in bed

 

Finally safe and sound 

 

 

 


© 2012 GDmonster



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This was a scary poem but it was also very mysterious. First you start out running away from something and you think you are safe when you are home in your bed but that might not be the case. This reminds me of scary movies this is how most of them are. You start out okay but the more and more you go into the story the more and more unsafe you are. Great Job with this. Keep up the great work.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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pssssh everytime the last line was so true! XD but i get why its crossed out....or i think i do, anyways i know the feeling, once the lights are turned off RUN LIKE HELL TO BED! lol yep Fear, the struggle is real T-T

Posted 6 Years Ago


Loved it! Especially the impact of that last line... Hauntingly good job. ;)

Posted 6 Years Ago


D-Deep. I l-like it very m-mu-much

Posted 6 Years Ago


Why did you leave me in suspense?! Wahhh! Pretty good poem. It's very suspenseful and made me feel unaware of what would happen next.

Posted 6 Years Ago


Short, but suspenseful. I feel like you can't help but read this fast because you want to see the conclusion. Well done.

Posted 6 Years Ago


This was a scary poem but it was also very mysterious (like Scooby-doo). First you start out running away from something and you think you are safe when you are home in your bed but that might not be the case (happened to me). This reminds me of scary movies this is how most of them are (scary movie 12345 and how ever more). You start out okay but the more and more you go into the story the more and more unsafe you are. Great Job with this. Keep up the great work.


Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Tense. Wouldn't want to be her.

Posted 6 Years Ago


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Why did you erase the safe and sound, I wonder

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Nice poem.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Scary!! >.<
Great job! Keep it up! :)

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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 GDmonster
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