Fear

Long narrow hall

 

Lights a flicker

 

Not alone

 

Stalking eyes

 

Began to panic

 

Shadows grab

 

Floor stained red

 

Now in bed

 

Finally safe and sound 

 

 

 

Reviews

[MandaBear]

This was a scary poem but it was also very mysterious. First you start out running away from something and you think you are safe when you are home in your bed but that might not be the case. This reminds me of scary movies this is how most of them are. You start out okay but the more and more you go into the story the more and more unsafe you are. Great Job with this. Keep up the great work.

[Jamie Cook]

pssssh everytime the last line was so true! XD but i get why its crossed out....or i think i do, anyways i know the feeling, once the lights are turned off RUN LIKE HELL TO BED! lol yep Fear, the struggle is real T-T

[InsanityWriter]

Loved it! Especially the impact of that last line... Hauntingly good job. ;)

[Luna Kusan]

D-Deep. I l-like it very m-mu-much

[Lil Guppy]

Why did you leave me in suspense?! Wahhh! Pretty good poem. It's very suspenseful and made me feel unaware of what would happen next.

[T. Val]

Short, but suspenseful. I feel like you can't help but read this fast because you want to see the conclusion. Well done.

[Andrew (MJ) Nugteren]

This was a scary poem but it was also very mysterious (like Scooby-doo). First you start out running away from something and you think you are safe when you are home in your bed but that might not be the case (happened to me). This reminds me of scary movies this is how most of them are (scary movie 12345 and how ever more). You start out okay but the more and more you go into the story the more and more unsafe you are. Great Job with this. Keep up the great work.

[Revera Love]

Tense. Wouldn't want to be her.

[Rhianne Ney]

Why did you erase the safe and sound, I wonder

[Lino Rie]

Nice poem.

[The Invisible Girl]

Scary!! >.<
Great job! Keep it up! :)