Light

I wrote this for my boyfriend, who helped me out of my darkest days

Darkness

Misery

And suddenly a spark

Curiosty 

Fear

And suddenly a flame

Hope

Paranoia

And suddenly a change

Progress

Healing

And suddenly a smile

Love

Happiness

And suddenly

Light

Reviews

[Emma Kirchhoff]

Personally, I enjoy this style of poetry, and you write it very well. I love the full circle change we can see in limited words. Thank you for sharing!

[GingerPocky]

Thank you for your review :)

[wordman]

a profound write,and light at the end of the tunnell

[GingerPocky]

Thank you for your review :)

[wordman]

you`re welcome

[otterbe]

I agree that this could be a remarkable piece, take out the" and's" they are very distracting and unnecessary. Has a potential to be powerful.

[GingerPocky]

Thanks for your input but I'm keeping them

[otterbe]

no problem, its a great poem :)

[Pinkhorses22]

I also think you should take out some unnecessary words, but with a little work, this could be amazing. I write a lot of poems like this, but I haven't posted them yet. Nice work, and the small improvement could go a long way. It has great potential.

[GingerPocky]

Thanks for your input but I'm keeping them

[jcfrancis]

this is a lovely poem, but i think it would gain strength by eliminating unnecessary words. Edit out the "and's" and "a's" and i think you would have a much stronger poem. poetry and brevity are natural partners..

[GingerPocky]

Thanks for your input but I'm keeping them