Storm

She feels the walls caving in,

she takes a look in the mirror,

disgusted by what she sees. 

"I wish I was braver,

prettier,

...more like her." 

She says shivering.

No one seems to understand her.

Her mind wants to find home.

She is like a shadow in this world.

A chapter of her soul, no one has read yet.

A lonely soul that's allergic to other people.

They affect her too much.

She keeps wandering off to greater places.

So unhappily in love with another world.

A world where she belongs.

So, alone she sits in the dark.

Dreaming away to a place where the stars shine brightly for her. 

...

Sadness hits her like a knife in the back at 3am.

She takes a steaming, hot shower trying desperately to scrub off all the bad voices.

Her head is a storm.

She has forgotten the passion she used to have for life,

her personality has become a burden.

She feels the water dripping on her skin like acid.

She turns off the shower and takes a deep breath.

... 

Author's Note

"This too shall pass" right?

Reviews

[Pete]

this is a good write Gullia. disturbing but very well written indeed. as usual many great lines. strong, painful, uncomfortable imagery. definately a troubled soul. can feel the torment. a real downer. 'She is like a shadow in this world.
A chapter of her soul, no one has read yet.
A lonely soul that's allergic to other people.'
'Sadness hits her like a knife in the back at 3am.'
'her personality has become a burden.' - excellent lines. loved them. great title & pic goes so well.

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much, Pete! I always look forward to your reviews :)

[richieb]

Very powerful, intensely written. Your words show how our minds when driven by fear can create painful images that we start believing in. Once we become panic stricken we lose our capabilities to hold on. Your poem touches on all these effects and lets us feel for a moment what the narrator is going through. Excellent work.
Richie b.

[Giulia King]

Amazing review, Richie. So accurate. Thank you so much for reading :)

[Isabella Ivy]

Her personality had become a burden, you say. I read that it had become broken. Interesting. That's how I felt in this reading. I think I've realized this about myself several times in life. Maybe everyone goes there several times(?) I never liked the 'this too shall pass' attitude because it holds no remedy in it for the suffering of 'now' and seams unsympathetic. I always wanted hear, 'wow. This is terrible! I'm sorry you're going through it'! Yet, it seems few can find these words to speak to another hurting soul. Just my thoughts :) Isabella.

[Giulia King]

Yes, broken is a good word to describe it too.
For me, "this too shall pass" feels like soothing words. No matter what you're going through, it will pass. As all things do.

[Isabella Ivy]

I'm glad the words comfort you :)

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

Wonderful reflection and deep emotions are covered and given through your words penned here.

[Giulia King]

Thank you for reading, Josie :)

[Josie E. Cook M. A.]

You are welcome!
:)

[Ana B.]

''A lonely soul that's allergic to other people.'' I love this line! There are more of those souls than we think. Sublime writing dear Gullia :)

[Giulia King]

That's true :) Thank you, lovely!

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the honest tone and realistic feel of the words.
"She has forgotten the passion she used to have for life,
her personality has become a burden.
She feels the water dripping on her skin like acid.
She turns off the shower and takes a deep breath."
The above lines. Lonely place to know and hard place to rise from. Thank you Gullia for sharing the powerful words and poetry.
Coyote

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much for reading! :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Gullia.

[Joey Nizz]

I love the depth and meaning in this one.. i love it thank you Gullia King :)

[Giulia King]

I'm happy you love it, Joey :) Thank you!

[Joey Nizz]

You welcome ^^

[Zoya]

You've expressed your many feelings in such a beautiful way in this poem, which, I guess, most people can only think of doing. The last two lines are magnificent; they kinda stole my heart away. The title is alluring as well. Great write!

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much, Zoe! I'm happy you liked this one :)

[Zoya]

My pleasure :)

[Najam Us Saher]

This poem has so much depth in it. Every line depicts true feelings. I liked it.

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much, Najam! :)

[Najam Us Saher]

It was a pleasure to read this. ☺

[Dr. YumnaKay]

My breath stopped when I read this! It's easy to say this too shall pass but those moments when you are going through this is like hell.

"A chapter of her soul, no one has read yet.
A lonely soul that's allergic to other people."

These lines, I liked the best. Allergic is the word alright. Defines clearly how I feel too!
I feel more dark pieces on the way coming from you, Gullia! Deep write.

[Giulia King]

It's hell, I agree with you. Thank you so much for reading, Yumna! I appreciate it :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You're always welcome, Gullia! 😊😊

[Farhan Shaikh]

I love to read your works, and this one is amazing very good write.

[Giulia King]

Thank you so much, Farhan! :)