Temporary Beauty

Blooming almond trees;

Rare in heavenly beauty

so temporary.

Reviews

[shruthi]

Ya exactly everything is temporary in this world...

[guy drori]

Yep I definitely agree

[shruthi]

okay thanks

[Jackie L]

This is beautiful in its simplicity.

[guy drori]

Thank you Jackie. . . appreciate the comment. Yes, what's beautiful bout Haikus is their simplicity which is often more profound than complicated things

[ReedWrite]

Perfect.
I remember in the movie, The Last Samurai, Katsumoto was fascinated with the cherry blossom...I loved this quote: The perfect blossom is a rare thing. You could spend your life looking for one, and it would not be a wasted life. And at the end of his life...he realized there is no one perfect blossom...they are all perfect. That is what your poem reminds me of. :)

[guy drori]

I am glad this poem reminded you of it . . . and I appreciate the review :)

[Levi Levin]

Very true. It's amazing how the simple things touch us so much. Great job!

[guy drori]

I agree Levi. Thanks for the review :)

[Pete]

This is beautiful and says a lot but I also wonder what you could do with a few more syllables. It stands wonderfully as it is though. It always amazes me how much can be said with just a few well chosen words.

[guy drori]

Thank you Pete . . . appreciate the review :)
One can do a lot with more syllables, yet as you probably noticed this is a Haiku, so it cannot contain further syllables than it already does.

[Pete]

I'm still learning. Thanks. Great write.

[C. Rose]

I really liked girl in black, and temporary beauty is a perfect concept for a haiku,

that being said, every syllable counts in a haiku and (in my opinion) "a plant that" adds no meaning.

I wonder what more you could add with three new syllables.

[guy drori]

Thank you for reading, and for your frank reply. you actually gave me something to think about there. You are right, every word counts and not only in Haikus but in every poem. I might re-read it and see if there is something I can do about it :)

[Amy R]

beautiful haiku :)
keep it up!❣

[guy drori]

Thank You :)

[Amy R]

ur welcome !(:

[Randhir kaur]

Beautiful.. sometimes less words gives more meaning... nice..

[guy drori]

Thank you...and I agree

[Randhir kaur]

Mention not..